Dad, I married a hero

My father was a soldier, he was the bravest man I knew
He was tall and strong, but sweet and kind too
I remember when I was a young girl, maybe four or five or six
How I would throw a tantrum, whenever he had to leave
"Your dad is a Hero baby, he's protecting us from bad guys."
My mother's words were comforting, they dried the tears in my eyes
"My dad is a hero" I would tell everyone I knew
Even though I missed him, I was proud of him too
One day, I fell in love with an amazing, loving man
He was tall and strong and sweet, he reminded me of my dad
He never wore camouflage, or dog tags or combat boots
But with his white coat and stethoscope, he was saving lives too
Then a pandemic ripped through the world, devastating everyone
And suddenly, my sweet, loving husband, was at the frontline of a war
Now a scene from my past plays out before my eyes
My little baby boy holds on to his father and cries
"Your dad is a hero baby, he's protecting the world from bad guys"
But as I hug my son tightly and we wave our love goodbye
I look up at the big blue sky and hope my father hears me
"Dad, I married a hero. Please keep him safe for me."

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is beautiful. Your musicality is choppy as I see you tried heavily to make it rhyme, and I should advise to just let it flow, the poem would write itself if you don't try to control the energy. You have the talent, you just need to hone the craft. I love the progression of ideas right up to the end, but if you made if a tad more seamless (you can be choppy for effect, but too choppy and it's jarring), this would elicit a greater catharsis from readers. Great start!

[Avia]

Thank you.
I always appreciate your reviews. I will work on the musicality. I'm working on learning the skill of writing poetry so that I can be a much better poet, thanks for the encouragement.

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Gaurav]

Its a very sweet piece and yet it strongly tackles the subject of pandemic which is a war in essence...love and thanks to those who are fighting it for us..through your words

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

A real tear jerker
I loved this
I’ll pray he’s safe x

[Avia]

Thank you Julie.
I really wanted to echo the way such families may be feeling at a time like this.
It's a really difficult time for them. I pray this all ends soon. All I can do is stay safe and pray.
I hope you're doing well where you are.