The Last Time

I’ve tried to make things better

I’ve tried to not be bitter

But my efforts turn to nothing

And I always end up losing

Crying, hurting, lost in my own self

While you’re free and my love’s abandoned on a shelf

I won’t take this anymore; God knows how I’ve tried.

I was never determined enough, but all that ends tonight.

 

This is the last time I’ll feel something, the last time I’ll look.

The last time I pick my phone and cry over what you took.

Tonight marks the last time I’ll ever think of you.

If only you could see my heart, you’ll know this all is true.

When you wake tomorrow morning, don’t expect to find,

The girl who keeps coming back, this is my last goodbye.

 

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

Clearly in this poem is a person who tried their best to be a good lover but was taken for granted.
And so life goes, as sometimes we need to move on forward from relationships where we try our utmost best to be loving but the love is not reciprocated.

WELL DONE!

[Avia]

I agree with you, moving foward is the best thing to do. Thanks for the review :)

[Dinesh Kumar]

Nicely penned
Beautiful
Really enjoyed

[OnlycallmeKathryn]

I ACTUALLY LOVE THIS. You used your words so well and t was definitely relatable.

[Avia]

Thank you!! :)

[Lavi]

Wooh, this tugged at my heartstrings. Very powerful emotion written here. Love it!

[Avia]

Thanks so much :)

[Davidgeo]

This may sound nihilistic, but, giving up sometimes lands you where you needed to be in the first place.

It's doesn't have to be rock bottom; it is possible to do this without too much damage.

[Avia]

Yeah, well, I'm learning that so I'm glad I've gotten to the point where I'm at. I think life is a journey and mistakes can either be road blocks or stepping stones depending on what you take from them. Thanks for reading :)

[Davidgeo]

It was my pleasure. (some mistakes give you herpes)

[Avia]

Lol. True, still something to be learnt from.

[Zoya]

I agree, the second stanza is very powerful! One should not sacrifice their self respect by running back to that person who left you for no valid reason. Very well written!

[Avia]

Thanks Zoe. Merry Christmas ☺

[Zoya]

No worries. Merry Christmas to you too! :)

[PandaPeaceful]

Your words are powerful, and speak complete honesty. You build a story which, has been lived through endless of times. A gorgeous poem. Well done.

[Avia]

Thanks so much. I really appreciate your reviews and support. Merry Christmas 😊

[PandaPeaceful]

Merry Christmas to you too! No problem.

[emipoemi]

The second stanza is beyond words - BEYOND WORDS!! aaah! The only thing I need point out is that it should be an "and" not a "but" in Stanza 1 Line 6 ("while you're free AND my love's abandoned on the shelf"). Without punctuation is harder to figure out what lines are linked to what thoughts, no matter how you head the transition into that line, "but" doesn't work quite as well as "and". Brava! ¡Magnífico! Well done!

[Avia]

Thanks :) This means a lot. Merry Christmas btw

[Karmee]

kinda sad and heartbreaking but so well expressed.

[Najam Us Saher]

Very strong words. When one feels that it has come a time where you cannot take it anymore, it is good to move on. I loved the rhyme. You made me feel your pain, I hope you are fine.

[Avia]

Thank you very much Najam. And I'm fine :) just trying to make some life choices

[Najam Us Saher]

I pray that no regret torture you after taking a decision. You are always welcome.