Even the sinful laugh

I tried to expose some of the lies and facades people play out during their day to day lives. I did so by contrasting the apparently changed sins to the grammatical structure. Find the clues :)

Sometimes the sins laugh

frolic chuckle and gasp,

 

whenever wrath sits there

calm and tranquil, unending care.

when Pride takes precious time,

to look up and face humility,

to remove the thin veil,

to observe another person and care.

when slender lust embraces

for another, soothing the soul

creating safe sanctions - free of sale.

when      g r e e d      gives        to       charity,

               providing,

      safe          havens,

when sloth feels the urge

to work, forging iron bars

and even making emotions and life time scars

when gluttony shares his

fries, and full course meal

when envy faces the sins - and says

‘it’s okay that lust is more curvy, I know I’m happy’

 

This is all a façade of course. envy said it with morose.

gluttony? He had another meal, and another meal right after that.

Mirrors reveal the real corpse. sloth daydreamed the dream.

greed? what else but the space he took?

How can we be something else. lust has lackluster snide, snark and sex

Pride? He has a deeper veil - one that escapes his avail.

 

Sometimes the sins want to be sinful.

And sometimes wrath wants to be wrathful. 

Author's Note

What do you think? Good? Bad? Any poetry tips are welcome :)

Reviews

[Ifreakinloveyou]

I really like how you did this, very creative and clever. I wouldn't change a thing :) good job

[Kethan]

Thank you! It means a lot. :)