The Wedding Bell

A daughter is always the small child of her father. When she gets married.....we know the pain of getting apart from our family.

The Wedding Bell

Tring,tring, the wedding bell rings

Outside the window the lovely bird sings

Such a lovely day the morning brings

getting attached to the new string.

 

I open my eyes, look at the date,

Oh my God,its gonna be late.

Quick for a bath, take another hour,

Another one hour, that’s a lengthy shower.

 

I must look, the prettiest among pretty,

In the centre of crowd, I would be kitty.

With beauty at its best,

I come out of the nest.

 

It’s my wedding day,

From all that way,

Towards a new home, for a new life.

I’ll be transformed from daughter to wife.

 

In the thick of crowd my head bend,

upon the locket he ties the thread.

Some time with dad, can I spend?

There’s no excuse he’s my only friend.

Time to depart

Feeling stuck inside heart.

When others smiled I cried,

The reason I give, because am bride.

 

My eyes search for my father,

But no one seems a bit to bother.

I search, I hunt then I cry,

like I was giving my last try.

 

I feel so sad,

I don’t see dad,

I sense loneliness,

My father’s my weakness.

 

Tring tring, the alarm bell rings,

Outside the window, the bird still sings.

 The happiest day, my husband brings.

I see my father, that’s a big thing.

 

Author's Note

so how did the wedding went ?

Reviews

[Prabha Salimath]

Avantika you just got me this is really not quite a new matter but the way you penned it made tear a little. I really fearing to face this I don't know will I gather the strenth or not but fearing a lot. Nicely written and heart touching being more attached to parents and specially dad ( till today we fight like kids for simple matters ) separating from them is really very hard.

[Lyan]

It doesn't feel like a poem but a story instead. a beautiful story of a wonderful celebration. good work!

[Avanthika]

well i was confused a bit with your review was it in favour or disfavr of poem , but then wen u said it good wrk i guess u might have liked it . ur suggestions are always welcome

[Lyan]

I liked your work:) I just felt it was more like a mini story versus a poem.

[Mayank]

Firstly, I wish you all the best for your married life. Reading this I am sure it was a big fat Indian wedding surrounded by all chachas, mamas, bhua and everyone we know... I like the bridal feel you have dropped here, the gorgeous bride smiling at first and crying before departure, reassured again and again.

[Avanthika]

u got it rightly, i wrote this thinking of a big indian wedding

[Avinash]

My best wishes for your new life .. :)

[Avanthika]

but ...........am not going to get married soon

[Avinash]

Ooops then whenever it happens ... :)

[Avanthika]

:) thanks you are the frst man to wish me for my new life

[Avinash]

hahahha.. it means you gonna remember me .. :)

[Avanthika]

for sure :)

[GA]

Wed is good idea .Not good born out of wedlock .One person should be in life i like wedding bell and wedding ring

[Avanthika]

thank you reena

[kublakhan27]

You've done a great job of capturing the heat of the moment...the rhythm and rhymes give it a song-like quality, and one can easily feel the emotion of intensity right to the finish, where it was nice to see a happy ending...nicely done :)

[Avanthika]

that means a lot , thank you frnd

[Pushkar Prabhat]

nice!
good poem.
i liked it.
:)

[Avanthika]

thank you pushkar

[Briana O'Connor]

I enjoyed reading this one. The wedding tale was not like many other love stories you read. There were two parts to this story, which is unique and added more depth. There were a few places where the grammar seemed a little bit awkward, but I can't decide if it added a sense of character to the story or not. The grammar was definitely unique. I liked this poem. Thank you for sharing.

[Avanthika]

Thank you frnd for the review, taking your suggestion into the account will work on the grammar