Life without you is very tough

like every mother daughter relation we too had complaints for each other, but then they say it rightly you never know what you have until you loose it and so do i now realize what she was for me.

What is the thing she fears,

I saw her eyes full of tears.

What did i do to make you cry?

what do you want me to try?

There is something you must see,

can you live without me?

She let herself meant to die,

saying everyone good-bye.

Everyone says that was the end,

my mom says never bend.

I pray to god,let it be a dream,

but life moves like a narrow stream.

I have to travel a long mile,

the only way to bring your smile.

I traveled the road very rough.

Life without you is very tough,

Life without you is very tough. 

Author's Note

if the lines makes you remember of your mom, am rewarded. So , definitely need your opinion.

Reviews

[Sreenath]

well this poem is mix of emotions and splendid story but the feel of the poem is destroyed with the usage of words i feel that the words at some places are squeezed to rhyme like
(I have to travel a long mile,
the only way to bring your smile)
.. try some good set of words to make it more powerful there are lot of set of words just explore and play with it without missing the core of the poem .. enjoyed reading it nice poem :)

[Megha]

wow... heart touching poem... amazing!

[Avanthika]

thank you megha :)

[ayesha gupta]

nicely penned. life without mom's advice, her love is difficult. i imagined it through your poem.
great job!

[Avanthika]

thank you ayesha

[Surya pradha]

an emotional poem which i felt you did justice too. well delivered.

[Avanthika]

thank you surya:)

[marcus]

its somethin that comes deep from the heart of the one who wrote this and strikes even deeper in the heart of the one who reads , it makes you realise should value somthing you have because when its gone it rearly comes back ... it did the effect on me so nice work here

[Avanthika]

a big thanks for those golden words, thank you Marcus.

[marcus]

you r welcome

[Happy hours]

wow...it left the remark of genuinity in your work.. :) glad to read your writing..

[Avanthika]

pleasure is mine :)

[raj24]

just dont know how to start..i feel everything has just stopped for a while..nice one Anathika..a special bond we share with our mother and its always special talking to her..thanks for the share :)

Raj

[Avanthika]

my pleasure raj

[Parimal Pratyush]

It has come straight from the heart which is all that matters. Very very good.

[Avanthika]

pleasure to hear those words from u , thank you mate

[hardeep sabharwal]

this is really an emotional work, the way you described emotional here is perfect, good job

[Avanthika]

thanks a lot hardeep

[Swaroop Manikandan]

beautifully written. . . . .

[Avanthika]

thanks my frnd