My Forever

My Forever I met

on a cold winter's night

My Forever I met

in a festive forest

My Forever I met

under the night sky

Under the winds of chance,

Under the waves of love

My Forever I met by fate

at the wrong time,

but at the right time

My Forever I met

forever ago & I'm just

now saying Hi.

Author's Note

This poem just came out of the blue and inspired me. I hope you enjoyed it. If so, leave me a critique below with what I could have done better with this. Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[¿]

Hmmm....that's bit blue to feel...but I enjoyed... :)

Few lines are penned heartedly here I feel... that 5th stanza is so correct! The right time is when that forever comes in our life....this novice loved reading it and so no critiques I could decide.....be happy foreva!

Thanks for sharing sir :)

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you Tahsin.Z!

[¿]

Heartedly welcome :)

[Jordan Smith]

Also, you have a beautiful smile :)

[¿]

Oh, thanks a lot!!☺

[Jordan Smith]

You're welcome :)

[Samuel Dickens]

I think this poem exemplifies the often futile search for the perfect mate. In my experience, (thrice married) we stumble about, hoping to find the "right one", but end up with one that we hope will do. Perhaps "forever mate" isn't doesn't mean what I think? Anyway, this poem sets my mind a'thinking.

[Tony]

I really liked the final stanza. If we are truly interested in that special person in our lives. We will learn something new about them all the time. Thanks for sharing your work here!

[Jordan Smith]

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem Tony! This was a good time in my life, but unfortunately did not pan out. But, it is still one of my favorite poems.

[Rye]

Such a short well written write, quite a powerful read

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you! I am glad that you enjoyed it :) Unfortunately, that relationship has ended. So, back to pouring out my heart onto a piece of paper as a single man lol

[Brandon Wile]

My Forever I met by fate
at the wrong time,
but at the right time
--> favorite

Short but powerful, really enjoyed

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you Brandon! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I enjoyed writing this one at the time.

[Olivia Danielle]

I've read some of your writing and your poems, and I absolutely love it! This poem is really nice!

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you Olivia! I'm glad you enjoy my writing!

[Amanda Trerotola]

"Under the winds of chance,
Under the waves of love."

Loved this stanza!

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you Amanda! I'm glad you enjoyed it. That's one of my favorite stanzas I have ever written

[emmajoy]

Whimsical and - in a strange way, wise; knowing how-when.. then, time turning 'pon time! Just long enough to beckon readers.. ending with a contented smile!

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you emmajoy! Sorry i'm just now responding to this lol

[emmajoy]

Is fine, am smiling a bonus!

[A.G.]

beautiful poem Jordan (: I love your lines,
"My Forever I met
forever ago and I'm just
now saying hi"
lovely lines and great flow-truly from the heart...im sure during that time of forever ago, their was deep longing. lol I don't know. forever for some could be a simple gaze or a few days, maybe even an hour. anyway, thank you for sharing your work my friend (:
I enjoyed it!
-A

[Jordan Smith]

I'm glad you enjoyed it Angelina :) Yeah, it was a simple gaze lol that's all it took. Love at first sight.

[Papaya]

It's all about the timing. :)
"Hi" is a great place to begin.
This is pretty cool in that it could be interpreted as romantic or a finding of one's own self. Anyway, nice poem.

[Chris Shaw]

Romantic and full of imagery. Nicely composed.

Chris