Written in the Stars

This one is dedicated to my special person in my life :) Here's to my love

It is written in the stars

our love for each other.

It is written in the stars

the sparkle in your eyes.

Your brown hair

and red lips

paint the night sky

with the beauty of

a greek goddess

Your playful words

and beautiful soul

shoot through my heart

like Halley's comet through the night sky

It is written in the stars

that as long as you

follow the North Star,

it will always lead you home.

Well, it was written in the stars

that I follow

the North Star

and it led me

straight to you

Author's Note

This is my first poem in a really long time. Let me know what I could have done better at and thanks for reading!

Reviews

[¿]

Absolutely a blissful writing for someone special!
Her dazzling beauty and your falling for it....grabbing some details which else might ignore....and finally the intuitions of stars that towards north star will be your home found if you follow....actually when you did...in her you discovered your home....well I think at that time it was not only home but the whole universe was found for you in her!!
Thanks for this amazing soulful read Sir!😊

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you for reading it and critiquing it! I am glad that it at least was, I assume, easy to follow especially for it being my first piece that I've written in around a year or two.

[¿]

An easy deep piece have always been my fave....You're heartedly welcomed😊!

[The Iron Horseman]

This is quite beautiful, my friend. If you show it to your lady love, I am sure she will be very taken with it.
One typo in the fourth verse - 'shoots' should be 'shoot'.

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you for the critique! I will make that change!

[The Iron Horseman]

You are welcome.

[Riddhi]

This is an absolutely romantic piece..I can feel your love for that person through this poem..That Halley's comet , north star comparison seemed nice in this beautiful piece..As you described brown hairs , red lips actually a picture was painted in front of my eyes...
Well done..
Keep on writing..

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you Riddhi!

[Chris Shaw]

This is a gentle and romantic write for someone special. I can feel the love in the lines. Nicely done Jordan.

Chris

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you Christine!