Dreams Change

Hey everyone! This is me trying to get back into poetry writing! Let me know honestly what you think about this one as I haven't written a poem in almost a year. Thanks for reading by the way!

Dreams can shape

who we are,

what we do,

when we believe.

Dreams can show

us a life worth living,

a life full of passion,

love & promise.

Your dreams can take

you so many places.

But just like a GPS,

routes change,

arrival times delayed

& destinations altered.

Not all dreams end

the way it shows.

New roads emerge,

new destinations arrive.

It's up to you

to decide if

you want to

keep dreaming or not.

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think. This is the first poem that I have written in almost a year so please don't be shy with the critiques. Let me know what you thought about it.

Reviews

[@JenniferNicholeAuthor]

I like it, there for I will give you an idea... what if you re tell that poem with the GPS metaphor in mind, but try telling it in first person... as in if you are driving and being re routed, given new opportunities, leaving the path, ect. Sometimes looking at a piece that is full of potential at a different angle can help you give it the perfect touch. Not saying the new angle would be better than the original (which btw is unique and honestly written), just maybe you could tweak it with a new take and who knows? Just a thought, JN ;)

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

Great piece of motivation! I like that you even make mention of changing routes or losing perspective - I feel like so many people forget the importance of some of those moments far too often.

[dead letter office]

please show us with metaphor and personal stories why you feel this way. the last stanza speaks of dreams, what are yours? The comments are meant to be constructive, Jennifer's review is spot on.

[Riddhi]

I really loved this..Dreams are integral part of ones life otherwise your life becomes nothing different than that of an animal...I liked the way you compared them with GPS..Actually Dreams shape who we are..You expressed it beautifully in this poem..
Keep on writing...

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you Riddhi!

[Yours Truly]

What a deep piece in such few words, I’d say you did really well and would enjoy reading more! I agree with Carol Cashes on how it makes it that much better that you stayed positive through the poem, thanks for sharing!

[Jordan Smith]

Thanks for your feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed this poem!

[JLily98]

I love the GPS comparison. I do feel like it's a bit broad, but in a good sense because it makes it a more relatable piece with a wider audience. Great job! You should definitely get back into it.

[Amy R]

"Not all dreams end the way it shows."
This is so true, holds a lot of meanings to it, reminds me of how love feels at times when you lose hope for a moment. But regardless what happens, it goes on, just like how you said "but just like a GPS, routes change, arrival times delayed & destinations altered." I really loved this poem, thank you for sharing!

[Jordan Smith]

Thank you Amy! I'm glad that you liked the poem :) I hope to write some more soon!

[Amy R]

You're welcome, i'll be sure to check for new ones.

[Jordan Smith]

I appreciate that :)

[Carol Cashes]

Yes, the GPS in my life has "recalculated" a few times. I like that you kept this on a positive note, however, ever the buzzkill (and I take my job very seriously!) dreams can break you if you hitch your star to someone else's. There's a potential stanza there, I think, a "caution" in order to qualify/completely define dreams and their impact. Good job.