You are my

When you can't just list your true love in one way

You are my

ice cream sundae

My special desert

that satisfies my hunger

You are my

tall drink of water

The very refreshment

I need in my life

You are my

Blue Jay

Soaring above and

beyond the rest

You are my

Pine Tree

Fresh like

a new morning

You are my

rose

The very thing

I love the most

You are my

flowing river

How my love for you

flows through my veins

You are my

car

The very thing I want to

ride off into the sunset with

Author's Note

Please RATE/REVIEW/CRITIQUE/SHARE as I really would like to see what yall think of this poem. I wrote this poem as part of an assignment in my Creative Writing College course. Thank You for reading.

Reviews

[Amber Lily]

I think this really drives the point of love home. While it is almost impossible to describe/explain love, we can try. And I think that by listing all of the little things in life that are cherished, and comparing it to that, says love very well. Well done! :)

[zunie frost]

You are my
Blue Jay
Soaring above and
beyond the rest
these really touched my heart
love this poem

[Jacob Clifford]

Very unusual take on this topic. The repetition was a nice touch, though I was a bit put off by the, as Siobahn McKenna put it, triteness of the whole thing. I did like the implications of the metaphors.

[Desert Rose]

love the repetition, easy to understand & as soft & sweet as a sundae indeed :)

[Siobahn McKenna]

At first I was afraid, I was petrified... It just sounded like you wanted to ingest me in some way!

In all seriousness. I like it. I feel like some of the things you are comparing said potentially edible person/thing to could be considered a little trite. Unless its suppose to be ironic? I don't know you, but I bet you can do better if that's not the case.
In my opinion, Pablo Neruda writes the best love poetry ever and the examples he uses are beautiful, are you familiar with his work?
No offense to you, and I see everyone else has given you amazing reviews, but I feel the purpose of the reviews are to tell you our true opinion and hopefully try to relay some constructive criticism and not jut tell you how great you are. Everyone is great already because it's their own experience, but obviously we all want to be better.

[Jordan Smith]

I really do appreciate all the constructive criticism. It will really help me become a better writer and poet as I am going to be a writer for my career. So, Thank You for the advice. I will definetly check out this poet you mentioned and see how he writes as I have never heard of him before.

[Emily L]

beautiful metaphors! You have written some impressive images that the reader can see easily. Great poem!

[Shy_muse]

Beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading this.
You are my
rose
The very thing
I love the most
This is my favorite stanza because of the rhyme scheme in it. I think this poem could benefit from a similar rhyme scheme throughout, but that aside this is beautifully written and I enjoyed reading it - definitely put a smile on my face < 3