Four Letter Commitment

Be sure to look for the only Letters that are capitalized in the first four stanzas in the poem and see what it spells...

Last minutes before

your life changes,

you start getting anxious,

you wonder if what you

are about to do is right.

On the other side

of the room, you have

a stranger standing, walking

towards you on a carpet

full of dreams and

flower petals of promise.

Valentines fill your heart

like sugar plums

dance around in

your head

Everyone is watching in secret

from a distance, waiting

for that special moment

when you ask her

Will you marry me?

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Nirvana]

Cool concept here. The spelling out of the primary emotion coupled with all of those other uncertainties/sense of nervousness perfectly encapsulates that feeling in itself. Good job with this one. Only thing I would change is the spelling of pedals to petals :)

[zaisham9393]

Very sweet and beautiful.I loved reading it .
Thank You for sharing :)!

[Philip Muls]

Time to place your big bet in life. You capture that feeling very well.

High stakes, big emotions.

I like the image of a carpet full of dreams.

[kyam]

Love everything leading up to the question, very clever. Well written.......Keep writing, you really captured it........Kyam

[Syreeta]

i love this very good i was feeling sad but this made me realize something so i can actually say thank you

[Jordan Smith]

Well, i'm glad that I could make an impact with this poem :)

[Hayli DeAnn]

I loved this. I've never thought about what it would be like for the man watching his bride walk down the aisle. Very beautiful piece of writing (: keep up the good work!

[Jordan Smith]

Thank You Hayli :) I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem

[Hannah]

This is so romantic! I love that you spelled out love with the first letter of each stanza. Cool idea!

[Jordan Smith]

Thank You :) I'm glad that you were able to enjoy it. I'm big into romance poems. So, this is right in my wheelhouse of poetry.

[Kira]

That's absolutely amazing, I haven't read anything that sweet in a very long time. Keep up the great work and ideas

[Amber Lily]

Without even saying the word love in your poem, you've perfectly described it. Although the capitalized letters spell love, it just adds to the symbolism to this piece. Fantastic work :)

[Archana]

nicely penned Jordan!!!!!!!!!!!!