Broken

Broken

A Poem by Jordan Smith

Broken Hearted
Broken Souled
The Heart wants to heal
The Mind does not

Separation threatens the family
Confusion looms over it
Clarity unknown
Logic out the window

The Sun starts to shine
just a bit brighter now,
things are looking u
Hearts start to rebuild

Parents get along,
fall in love again
Apologize for what almost occurred.
All is well
in the family

Then, the curve ball
gets thrown,
The rug pulled out form underneath you

You watch as
your father, the one person
that is suppose to
show you what
commitment really means
leaves.

He leaves a family
confused,
hurt,
and betrayed.

Broken Hearts
Broken Souled
The Heart can not Heal
The Mind rejects what occurred
The family divided
Their lives forever changed

© 2016 Jordan Smith


Author's Note

Jordan Smith
Sorry that I haven't been writing and posting in a while. Happy New Year to everyone! Review this one and rate please! Thank You for reading my work.

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That was so beautiful, I could feel the emotion and great break in every word. Absolutely wonderful!

One thing... In the third segment in the third line I believe that you meant to say "up" but you just said "u"

Minor error, no biggie :) I really love you work though! Full ratings!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your review :) I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Oh yeah, I'll have to go and fix t.. read more



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That was so beautiful, I could feel the emotion and great break in every word. Absolutely wonderful!

One thing... In the third segment in the third line I believe that you meant to say "up" but you just said "u"

Minor error, no biggie :) I really love you work though! Full ratings!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your review :) I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Oh yeah, I'll have to go and fix t.. read more
That is amazing. Personally a favorite. Very real considering I've been here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Developing a hurtful yet basic idea into real life situations. At some point many of us have to get our heart broken by someone or maybe we are the heartbreakers ourselves. I love the line, "The Heart wants to heal"

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank You for the comment :)
I loved this.Very emotional.Thanks for sharing :))!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it. Thanks for sharing. I love the use of repeating so.e of the lines, and the words and tune just flowed together. Thanks again for sharing this c:it's so wonderful

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awww Jordan! Talk to me. My heart aches for you...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a painful truth to many, a heartfelt purge and one that reminds the reader how vulnerable we really all are...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hello !! Jordan . is good to see you again . it's been a while since i heard from you !!
how are you ?
ok now back to the poetry ! your poem is so great i have a hysterical time reading it !! every words have a deep heartfelt touch !! thanks for sending me the request ! full ratings as always

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the review Zunie! I am doing better now in life. Sorry this response is 2 years late l.. read more
zunie frost

6 Years Ago

I'm good. No problem friend
This poem reflects the confused and bewildered state of mind. The emotions are expressed in a very raw form.
I hope you are okay...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank You for your concern. I appreciate it alot.
Oh Jordan. This is rough. I hope you're okay. Very well written and made. Don't you love how we can pour emotions out into writing and then we feel a bit better? Hopefully your father turns around real soon. :)
Cheers! x

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Thank You so much Kathryn :) That really means alot to me

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Added on January 19, 2016
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Jordan Smith
Jordan Smith

Houston, TX



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28-year old former poet trying to maybe get back into the world of writing. Slowly trying to find that part of me again while healing my heart. more..

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