Meaning

my thoughts on why we are here could be bordom lol its probly much deeper tho i think this scratches the surface tho

Just being light isn’t enough

We have to have some meaning

Some cause

Sure we could sit in the spirit and heal

But the soul would grow board of one plane

It wants a cause

To merge itself with conciseness

To manifest itself in a physical world

 

But the soul cant be confined to one world

It wishes to flow between

Hints a meaning for death

But lets take death out of the equation

Say we learn to flow concisely

Or should I say unconcisely

wouldn’t there be no need for death

wouldn’t this be eternal life

 

But no one conciseness must grow boring

Deaths essential for a good life

For many lives

For many lessons

For a fun life

Author's Note

comments idea on expanding on what i got

Reviews

[Sam Severn]

So freakin' beautiful n' philosophical n' so unexpected in the way it ends:
"But no one conciseness must grow boring/Deaths essential for a good life/For many lives/For many lessons?For a fun life".....Jeez! Who'da thunk this very-heavy poem was gonna end with the words "fun life"?? WAY WAY COOL! ㋡

[Prateeksha Khot]

beautiful poem. keep it up

[Cody Wiggins]

This is a really good poem. I really could feel it man

[Lilly]

Definetly just scratching the surface - something you could expand on but only if you wanted to - i think it is great as it is - very thought provoking. It is a topic I'm sure we have all been fixated with at one time or another...
Great work.

[Charles]

As you say in the epigram, this scratches the surface - only begins to address the reason we're here. That's good... I'd like to see a more dramatic example of what meaning is, though, than simply saying the soul wants/needs something (anything) to pull it out of a one dimensional world. I'm not sure that your made-up words (around the root word (concise) is effective - unconciseness in particular causes me to stumble when reading the piece. Depending on how much time you wanted to spend on it or how 'mainstream' you want it to be, I'd consider the judicious use of apostrophes and an upgrade of grammar. I like the idea of 'taking death out of the equation' - this is the point where the poem hits its stride. Good work.

[The Last Poetic King]

Pretty good man, confusing at parts but pretty good piece. I'd say.