Is this Love or Just Confusion

This is a song im done with it but wanna change a few peices and add one more verse

Now I take my walk

Down to the beach

Singing sweet, sweet melodies

And the next baby

To walk by me

Gives me a holla

Making my insides scream

And I say

Baby, how’d you like

To go for a spin

Then we take our walk

Make some sweet love talk

And that’s when she caught me

Like a fish on a hook

Leaving me asking

 

Is this love Or just confusion

Is this love Will I ever find out

Is this love or just confusion

Baby don’t be messing me round

 

Now I been following you

Since you walked up to me

In the way you move

Really makes me groove

So don’t stop

You look so hot

Oh baby

You really make my heart sing

Just don’t be messing me round

 

Is this love or just confusion

Is this love or do you be misusing

Is this love or just confusion

Baby don’t be messing me round

 

Now baby I’m tired

Of you using me

Anyway you please

In I’m tired you abusing me

Beaten this heart around

Cus baby

This heart is born to sing

This heart is born to sing

This heart

Is born

To sing

So baby

Don’t be messing me round

Author's Note

yeah i didnt realize that this was also the name of one of hendrix's songs but im working on changing it up some i wouldnt want to steal from that god of a guitarist i just thought of the line and then started writing
pls send opinions and idea to better it

Reviews

[MagiCrystal]

Awesome... now I want the music.. Maestro !.. let's go

[QuietPoet]

I liked this, I read it like a song, so it came out clearer. I hope you do add more to it, its great.

[Lilly]

This is really great! Love this - I imagine it would be an awesome song along with the music but the lyrics read really well on their own too.

I'm not sure what to add - I don't really think it needs anything

Great work :)

[Undying Glory]

really nice work, and i'd really love to hear how you would play this. awesome

[Soul Magic✯]

wow this is very well written from the heart and soul. i dig jimi hendrix... keep doing your thing. i enjoyed reading this piece

[clemon73]

I like it, has great flow. One part i found awkward was : "In I’m tired you abusing me" not really sure what you are trying to say. Other than that Great Job.

[HorrorMaster]

very good

[Bette]

this is great i would love to hear it with the music.

[Moth Phoenix]

omggssss great job!!! I love it, in my opinion i wouldn't change much =] I love it!!!!

[S. Kimball]

Sounds like song lyrics more than a poem, but it makes a good poem too.

I don't have a ton to say here. Your flow was good as always, your voice is consistent (and good), and your message had some emotional weight to it.

Overall, not bad at all. I have one suggestion. This may simply be the way you wish to put it, but:

"Is this love or do you be misusing"

I think that might be better if it was "Is this love or are you misusing".