Shamans Vision

a vision of mine in a deep trance

In a trance
The man would sit
Traveling through space and time
When he reaches his destination
He finds himself in the Indian's dance
He sits upon the rock
Like a shaman in deep thought
The Indians dance around him
In their ritual of inner sight
Then fire roars
And in it he sees
All the futures majesty
He sees love
Sees music
Happiness
Then tragedy
After he sees his insights
The fire soars
And the Indians scream their cries
As colored smoke fills the lands
And in the smog the vision clears
Awakening he finds himself in tears
For his loved ones
And for years to come

Author's Note

reviews pls

Reviews

[Bette]

this is great! vivid. i am choking on smoke! lol well done!

[MoonlitAngel]

In the fifth line the second 'he' should be 'the' I think.

I like this a lot. Very deep, discriptive. Paints an amazing picture behind your eyes. I love it. :)

[HorrorMaster]

Very good, i love this one.