My Eden

a place in my mind where i am at peace

I close my eyes

and go away

off into better days

I've searched far and wide

for these pleasantries that are inside

for it's where i go away

where my problems run astray

and i slip away into my garden of sort

my own eden

my private resort

for in my mind reality divides

leaving conciseness pure as bliss

where i hide in my mind

behind closed eyes

 

Author's Note

it flowed out, opinions and did i miss spell nething

Reviews

[Annabel Lee]

Great flow, good theme, everything about this poem is awesome. Keep it up! :D

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good poem. I like the flow and everything. Good job. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Eye0fthebeh0lder]

You never cease to amaze me. Keep up the good work.

[Moth Phoenix]

I love it. It's deep and meaningful love. Great job love

[victoria]

ya know, everyone should have a place, weather its real or in their mind, that they can go and just chill. i know i do :D haha the is super good, it really flowed. great job :D

[Charles]

So, you have a place to hide do you? Everyone needs such a place - it's nice that you've found yours. Nice flow to this poem - a real easy read. You ask about spellings: pleasantries, it's, astray (one word), why the capital M in My of the 10th line, and conciseness. The rhyming is really quite irregular, but that doesn't distract at all... there's enough rhyming to interest the reader but not so much that it is boring. Good work (correct the spelling, my friend). :-)