Gargoyle's Perch

High in the sky

On a dark, moonlit night

The gargoyle watches

From his perch

Gazing deep

Into the heart of the city

He sees all of the madness

All of their sadness

As lights flash

And the cars crash

People cry

And people die

Guns fire

And druggies get higher

The book of the world

Adds more to its darker chapters

The gargoyle is to be their guardian

To add light to this book

But he cant guard all of them

And all of their evils

Turn him to stone

Leaving them to fend for their own

Til the day they fend for each other

Author's Note

reviews pls, opinions?

Reviews

[Hippy's Sister]

Brother, you have a strange mind, i love it(:

[Eye0fthebeh0lder]

Wow, I really like the idea of the gargoyle being a stone because of our evil. Nicely done.

[Charles]

This is a good portrait of the city as seen from above (the gargoyle's perch). I guess the fact that you have no punctuation at all in the poem accounts for the missing apostrophe in 'cant.' That's OK (even though cant is a word in its own right), but raises the question of why the apostrophe in the title, then. Probably there for the appearance and the meaning: 'gargoyles perch - without the apostrophe - would lead the reader to think perch is a verb that the gargoyles are doing). I know what you're doing in the last two lines, but as is they are equivalent... why not say 'fend on their own' in the former and stick with 'fend for each other' in the latter. I think that's what you mean - that they take of themselves until the day they take care of each other, right? I like the idea of all the evils turning the ggargoyle to stone. Well done poem. :-)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I like it because it is very expressive. I love expressive.

[Theresa]

I really enjoyed this. It made me think of a building in the city (NY) that has gargoyles on top of it. It's like they are above the city streets seeing all that is happening. Kind of like a fly on the wall just observing not able to do a thing. I like the concept. Great piece and nicely done.

[c.m.]

Beautiful, I loved it. The rhyme you had going was great. Good job.

[Keevan]

deep. great job! i agree with BlackBlood. amazing work! This is going in the Favorites library!

[MoonlitAngel]

Wow. This is definitely a deep poem. Great job. I didn't find any mistakes, which is awesome.:) I really like it. Keep up the amazing work.!

--Blood

[The Last Poetic King]

Yeah man good job man, I enjoyed this piece. Keep it up, bro.

[The Perfectionist]

You're missing an apostrophe in there. "can't"

You do a great job in the first half of painting a picture, but your metaphors get a little mixed near the end. Suddenly you drop a book on us (which is fine) but then you talk about the gargoyle adding light to the book. Uh, no. Books don't need light.

I reread it again, and from what I can see your rhythm is flexible enough that you can remove that line entirely if you like. It feels very out of place in this otherwise very consistent and somber poem.