Feast on Their Pains

i thikn im going to take a couple poems just like this in mix it to one epic one

Tear the smile from her face

Carve the hurt in her soul

Break her spirits

Just to fill yours

 

Drink her tears

Feast on her pains

Feel good about yourself

You glutinous basterd

 

Fill that hole in your heart

The only, worst way how

But its ok, its all human nature

To destroy others to better yourself

 

Aren’t you glad to be human

Author's Note

its similar to someother peices id like a review

Reviews

[C. Rose]

Shocking honesty...love it. It's bite stings. "Carve the hurt in her soul" really struck me. Nice write.

[Taylor H.]

I love the truth behind this. It sounds so sick and yet its just a more exaggerated version of everyday life. Great job.

[Theresa]

Such truth within your words. So many people use others to either get ahead or to make themselves feel better. It's a terrible thing actually. You portray that perfectly with a hint of sarcasm (atleast I sense it). Nicely done.

[Jenny Nelson]

Love the sarcasm. Fits well with the harsh words and meaning. Darn shame so many fit this description.

[MoonlitAngel]

I think 'basterd' in the second stanza is spelled b*****d. I like it, and it definitely is a powerful slap in the face. Great write.:)

--Blood

[The Perfectionist]

Someone already pointed out your technical errors so I won't repeat them. Oh, you should have a question mark at the end there, too.

Boy, do you get angry in this one. There are no mixed metaphors or veiled words, this is out there, in your face, and straight to the point. I think poetry has forgotten that that is okay to do sometimes; people tend to get wrapped too tightly in metaphor. This was a welcome break.

[Electric Fascination]

this gave me a sadface ): good write(:

[c.m.]

So so true. Horrible, but it's the truth. Great piece.

[Lilly]

- definetly a very strong piece - great images in this too

[Stammers]

I don't think this should have made me smile, but maybe I'm sadistic. It's really good, I wouldn't worry about technical s**t, it's the idea behind a piece that matters, otherwise why would anyone read it?

In your face imagery too - drink her tears. That's strong.