Ourself

how humans are so cruel

hand in hand
with the devil we sin
for another day
to be in better standings

for ourselves alone
disregarding the one we hurt
working for your own cause
we fight
to put others down
we fight
to make them cry
to make them feel hurt
only to harm their self esteem

its the human way
its our nature
human nature
to only better ourselves
 
but the best way to better our self
would be to better others
to help their cause
to fight for whats right

helping the only one who matters
our self

Author's Note

reviews? unfinished

Reviews

[MoonlitAngel]

The second to last line.. Is that supposed to be 'how' or 'who'?

I like it. It definitely points out that even the nicest people can put others down so they feel better about themselves. We're just human after all. Which, is clearly stated in this. Very good. I like it a lot.:)

[The Last Poetic King]

human nature like i said should be underlined. and italicized. but yeah i read this one its good man.

[The Perfectionist]

I'm not really sure what to make of this. I like the harsh, dark tone, but this one just felt bland for the most part. Your writing style is very suited to storytelling, and this isn't a story, so maybe that's why. I'm glad it's unfinished, because I don't like that ending either.

How should be who in that second-last line

[QuietPoet]

This was very true and a great write. People shouldn't make fun of others, but some just dont understand that it hurts. I liked this a lot.

[victoria]

this is good, i bet it would be amazing once its done. i love the message, my favorite stanza is "but the best way to better our self
would be to better others
to help their cause
to fight for whats right"

i find that so completely true. keep up the great work :)

[HorrorMaster]

I agree the message is wonderful, but i think you should finish it.

[Bette]

this message is wonderful thanks for sharing!

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow, i love this and i agree with you, "the best way to better ourselves, is to better others"