"Better Left Said"

You’re a horrifying train wreck 

barreling down hot steel,

scraping with sparks and fire;

 

You’re a ravaged boat lost at sea,

crashing against angry waves,

thrust into the eye of your most recent storm;

 

You’re the most brutal winter on record,

closing down schools and airports

with your blizzards and black ice; 

 

You’re a fiery plane crash

plunging from the air,

exploding into your latest casualty;

 

You’re a broken down old truck

with blinding high beams and blinking hazards,

waving down a fix for your never ending problems;

 

You’re a frightening example

of self destruction and inner chaos,

of everything left unsaid and undone.

Reviews

[h d e rushin]

Wow! this sounds similar to the speech my daughters mother gave to me when
she said, after searching her soul, she could find NO redeaming qualities worth
saving about me. Better left said (when one is totlaly reprehensible) than
unsaid....

good work, hder.

[Kimberly Ellis]

Thanks! :)

[Relic's Bare Trees]

A good amount of metaphors floating throughout this poem. Self-destruction can indeed come in many forms and that inner chaos is something so hard to correct once it becomes imbedded in the mind. Good poem Kimberly.

Pendragon

(Dark Realm)

[Kimberly Ellis]

Thank you :)

[Relic's Bare Trees]

You're welcome.

[M.M.I]

I liked it. The way you summed up the metaphors in the last stanza made it precise and more memorable. Also, good imagery.

[Kimberly Ellis]

Thanks :)

[Distant horizons]

Can't decide if this is the best put down, or best reality check i've read in a long time. Such is the eloquence and flow of your words, i'll go for reality check.Very nicely done.

[Kimberly Ellis]

Thanks a bunch! :)

[zainul]

Great write.
Best stanza:
"You’re a frightening example

of self destruction and inner chaos,

of everything left unsaid and undone."

[Kimberly Ellis]

Thank you! :)

[zainul]

You are welcome.