Agonizing

I am your target,
Choose your best weapon.
The nastiest blade you can find
Impale it through my chest.
And watch me bleed dry
Watch my blood adorn your blade.

Then take that wretched knife,
And stab it on my back
Again and again and again
And watch me writhe in pain.

Til it shreds my flesh
Til it empties my chest.

An injection filled with rage,
Inject it in my veins.
So that hatred fills the hole
And fire burns my organs.

So I can never feel love again..
Only hate.

Only bitterness in my mouth.
Words spitting lava.
Scars, wounds and pain
Fire, anger and hatred.

My soul wrecks havoc
A void tearing my insides out
The flames engulfing me around
As I dissolve into ashes,
As I reduce into just a frame.

Author's Note

I couldn't find a better title. Any suggestions?

Reviews

[Chuck]

You bookended the themes in this so well. Read the first line then the last and you know there is progression. I love the metaphor of the frame. Great Job, good sharing. Great poems come from great emotion, it people critique you for the thought process then they should read an essay - this is a poem, and an insightful one at that.

[Aura Devour]

Thanks a lot, chuck.

[Blackheart]

The very imagery of pain and misery is so profoundly expressed here. I loved it. Beautiful use of words as well. Adds to the magic that adorns this piece. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

in last stanza..."my soul wreaks havoc"

really like "watch my blood adorn your blade"

lots of angst in this---a possible suggestion for title..."Your Sheath"

lots of strong wording in this.

[Aura Devour]

Thank you so much for your suggestion. Glad that you liked it.
But I'd like to know why did you suggest "Your sheath"? What made you suggest it? Just curious.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i was thinking of Juliet ....saying "oh happy dagger, rest and let this be thy sheath" speaking of her heart as she thrust the dagger into her chest---it is the home for the dagger.

i know, crazy eh?

j.

[Aura Devour]

Interesting it is. Thanks for the suggestion. :)

[Neytri]

Oops! So much of hatred.... I wonder what made you write this, but let me tell you, whatever you write is so manipulative, I mean the words you choose are so strong. You make the reader aware of what you think..and that's because of the talent you have, the talent of expressing yourself so powerfully.
However this time reading it was a bit disappointing, not because it wasn't well written but because I realize that it needs one to go through really bad experiences to be able to write something like this. Take care...

[Aura Devour]

Thanks a lot. It's not just my personal experience, it's culmination of various experiences of many people who have hit the lowest bottom, if you know what I mean. :)

[Neytri]

Yes, I do :)