Captive in the Woods

My first-ever poem! :D

There is a body
Hidden deep in the woods
Under the leaves
Covered in blood

A gruesome smile
Stretches across its face
Darkens my nightmares
And beckons me closer

When I awake
Your presence still lingers
Held captive here, by the pieces
That once told of us

You do not tell
Where you are hidden
Are you somewhere safe, now?
Somewhere warm?

I always wonder
If you're buried
If you're trapped
Beneath the dirt

Perhaps you're resting
Peacefully, now
Or do you lay restless
In your shallow grave?

Our memories sit in a box
Abandoned by the road
Washed away
By the relentless rain

Whispers of the past
Keep me bound and chained
Near the place
where you are sleeping

But for now I'll wait
And sweep
The thorns and glass
Away

Wherever you may be,
Wait there for awhile
Maybe one day I'll meet you there
And be sheltered from the cold.

Author's Note

Wow, this brings back so many memories. This was the first poem I'd ever written. *sighs*

Reviews

[The dark story]

it is really enthralling to read and is heart touching too.
i ;particularly like these stanzas:
"
Our memories sit in a box
Abandoned by the road
Washed away
By the relentless rain

Whispers of the past
Keep me bound and chained
Near the place
where you are sleeping"

i can only read poems on p.c. (though i prefer stories more than it).but reading stories on a computer really makes my brain aches(sorry.).(i can read a novel of 600 pages in two days but it will take me two years to read that on a p.c.) .i was waiting for you to write a poem so that i can read your work too....and i'm glad thAt you did.......anyway.it is a great poem with amazing theme and amazing diction.nice work!!!!!!!!

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Thank you so much! And I totally understand... Reading on the computer makes my eyes hurt too.

[The dark story]

no problem...it is my pleasure to read your nice works

[Drifter]

Strangely, I found myself growing paranoid as I read it. Then my cell went off... odd, very, very odd. While this piece seems stretched in multiple directions and I wasn't always sure what you were going for, it wasn't a bad read. Also, some of the wording seems jilted, messing up the flow a bit. Still, I did enjoy it.

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Well, that's... Actually kinda weird. XD yeah... It's my first poem and it's kind of messy. Thanks for the review!

[Drifter]

It probably didn't help I'm in the garage, working on a horror story. I heard something move around outside when I was reading it. Anywho, you're welcome. It's definitely not bad for a first poem. Definite potential there. :)

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Haha, of course that wouldn't help.

Thanks, again.

[Imagination-mage]

i thought this was very well written, reminded me of a video game called Corpse Party (manga and anime too), but that could be cause i recently finished watching a walk through :/ either way, i loved it and enjoyed the read. I suck at poetry so compared to urs mine suck:) Loved it!

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Thanks for the review! Is it a good manga/anime? It sounds pretty interesting... :)

[Imagination-mage]

well...i can't take too much bloodX( ironic cause i enjoy a good dose of it

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Haha! If it's violent then it's guaranteed I'll love it... Well, most likely. Have you seen Higurashi?

[Imagination-mage]

~shivers~ can not watch....too gory!!! You remind me of a bestie of mine who love Elfin Lied, gawd i couldn't watch it for 2 minutes-_-'

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Haha! I stopped watching it because of the naked lady in the first episode... But to each his own, right? xD

[Imagination-mage]

yup:D either way he loved it and i was all "The hell?!". Meh, have u heard of +Anima?

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I've heard of it but... Never seen it. Is it good?

[Imagination-mage]

It's cute and creative in my perspective:) but it's a manga. How bout Soul Eater?

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Haha, yeah! It's one of my faves.

[Imagination-mage]

I'm gonna put it out there…I AM A KIDDXCHRONA FAN.

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I'm sorry but... HOW DOES THAT WORK? XD am I missing something? I don't know... Why's it such a popular pairing?

[Imagination-mage]

Cause their so cuteXD

[Imagination-mage]

Symmetry meeting none symmetry it was bound to happenXD

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Lol true! What gender is Chrona anyways?

[Love Demon]

A boy :DDDD
sorry, could'nt help it XD

[Imagination-mage]

Totally a girl!!!

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Lol I have to agree with love demon here.

[Imagination-mage]

WHOA!! 2 against 1, i'm gonna have to step up my game!!! BRING IT>:) YOUR CLAIM!!!

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Lol! Well in the anime they refer to him as a guy. *throws up hands* that's all I got.

[Imagination-mage]

in the manga/anime when they say Demon Swordsman: they call Chrona a boy but when they just say Chrona they say SHE! The demonswordman is reall Ragnarok so technically their calling Ragnarok the boy and Chrona the SHE!! MY CLAIM!!!

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Hmm. Maybe Chrona is a tranny. That would explain quite a bit.

[Imagination-mage]

LOLZ i hate it when ppl resort to that -_-' but she's a girl, remember her tard of a mother put her in this dilemma:D

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Lol well you never know! It's pretty common in Japan!

[Imagination-mage]

LOL that is cruel! but i will admit hilarious

[Imagination-mage]

i'm moving this conversation into a message, u mind?

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Naw, not at all. XD

[Ana Drake]

Don't put your poetry skills down! I really liked it, it creeped me out and excited me at the same time. Great write:)

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Aw, thanks! Glad you found it creepy. XD

[Ana Drake]

Lol :)

[Castonovia]

Haunting yet entirely emotional tinged with such fear... love the wording in this piece that draws you in and captures your attention, awesome indeed ;)

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Thank you for reading and commenting!

[Castonovia]

No problem :p

[Imagine Blade]

This one is dark but sad. The two themes don't usually go well but this is well-written. This was very fun (though a bit depressing) to read! Great job!

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Awww, thank you so much!

[Sid]

This is a great poem, very well written...the way the fear gripping the narrator comes out is especially very well done...this was really enjoyable...great work!!

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Thank you!!

[Rhianne Ney]

This is a great poem... i felt the fear that embraces the narrator's heart... She was wondering if that person she's thinking of is safe or not... You manage to capture the essence of the poem... Good job... (:

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Thank you!!!

[Rhianne Ney]

(: You're very welcome

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Wonderful poem. I kinda liked the scheme, its a bit darkish.
great job!
100/100

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Thank you!

[Tai Ryens]

Great concept to formulate on; at first I took your grave metaphor literally (which led to assumptions of grave-robbing, murder, guild of association, so on . . .), but as the stanzas formed, the meaning spoke out to me. I enjoyed this; well done.

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Thank you so much! Haha, I was kind of afraid of that. Oh, well, no use changing it now.
read moreThank you so much! Haha, I was kind of afraid of that. Oh, well, no use changing it now.

Thank you so, so much for the nice review! :)

[Tai Ryens]

Afraid of . . . ?

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I did consider people taking the grave metaphor seriously.

[Tai Ryens]

Oh, my apologies. 'Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder' anyways.

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Nah, it's alright. Maybe I need to fix the fact that everyone says I sound like a hillbilly online.

And that's true!

[Tai Ryens]

You sound more of a decent facebook user over a hillbilly; considering that most teenagers these days type "lik dis dont worry ur smart."
In all actuality, you sound nothing like a hillbilly.

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Well, I'll take that as a compliment since I'm not exactly a teenager yet.

I haven't met anyone my age that types like a normal, civilized, human yet. It's a bit irritating, but I've gotten used to it.

[Tai Ryens]

Same here.