Sandbox Love

A playful poem....

 

You said lets play cops and robbers

I agreed to play

Before I knew it

You took off and ran away

I looked down

There was a hole in my chest

A ransom note where my heart used to be

I guess I was the cop

Let the chase begin…. 

Reviews

[Jack Isaac]

Really good! Caught me by surprise.

[redrose0308]

So playful and yet takes a turn for the profound! This is a near perfect but strange balance so well woven together. I really enjoyed this!

[Laura E. Aranda]

again so clever! it is refreshing to read a poem i can understand

[Moflo]

I like the twist this piece takes. It starts off so playfully and takes a profound turn, but not a painful turn, an optimistic one. I like it.

[~ Stefanie ~]

Wow this was great! It was short, but packed a lot of punch into it :)

"There was a hole in my chest
A ransom note where my heart used to be"
Loved this line!
Great job!

[paparapapa]

Haha. So cute! This one's totally relatable! Liked it. ;)

[Poisoned Hearts]

"A ransom note where my heart used to be."

I can relate a lot to a lot of that.

Good piece!

[Drew]

You didnt need alot of words to wow me,I felt like i could relate when i read this

[paradise]

Wow nice I like it really deep and emotional with just a couple words great job

[emma]

oh snap! that was amazing! it was quick, but powerful. and it's such a relatable poem, too! seriously, great job:)! 100/100!