Sink or Swim?

Feeling lost and confused....

I took the helm

As buckets of water crashed all around

Soaking me to my very core

As light crackled and thundered

Illuminating the dark corners of my mind

I wiped away droplets of despair   

 

I am a captain

With a busted compass

Without a crew

Anchored to the ocean

A beautiful yet wretched love

The only companion I have

 

I sail on

Through murderous storms

Floating aimlessly

In a world drowning

A vast gaping hole

The gateway to limbo

 

I fell on the deck  

As gusts of wind played with my hair

The helm a spinning existence

In the wake of terror

A jagged landmass approaching

A sharp twisted smile

 

Only seconds

Until my life balanced

On the edge of a plank

A deep unexplainable horror

Frozen in fear

Sweat and tears

 

I am lost at sea

Reviews

[Cassie Fraga]

absolutely beautiful!! love love love the metaphorical use and emotion!
Awesome read!!

**I took the helm

As buckets of water crashed all around

Soaking me to my very core

As light crackled and thundered

Illuminating the dark corners of my mind

I wiped away droplets of despair** The Girl with the smile

great opening phrase!
keep your ink flowing sis Im diggin your style!!

[A.Taylor]

Very well written and the imagery definitely puts me out to sea with 18 foot waves in the middle of a thunderstorm rocking and rolling all over the place and feeling oddly cold, as the ship tends to feel in those types of situations... I have entirely too much experience being at sea with 6 years in the Navy and you have definitely hit the nail on the head here even if you were meaning to use it metaphorically. It really stirs in me that "all alone and surrounded" feeling you get after 7 or 8 months of being on deployment.

[paparapapa]

I loved the second stanza! Oh and amazing imagery! Good job on this one. ;)

[Sophia Gurley]

Wow...... Amazing. I feel like that at times as well, but couldn't have said it better myself. In this case, we both should keep swimming.

[A.B.Ciao]

I agree, great imagery. Well done, thanks!

[Farah]

This is really cool! I can actually imagine all this in my mind. Good imagery and display of emotions.