I am the beast with the slavering jaws The one who stalks you in your shadow Enshrouded by numerous flaws That ragged, bird-pecked scarecrow
You see me not, veiled by the moon Born of darkness, fleshed by mist But all I care for is that you will be mine soon My burning bonds are but a kiss
And I will cradle you dearly And protect you from the cruel world and reveal to you my own Perhaps then will you see my love clearly? My world of shattered glass, screams and bone
It is like light to gloom Or beauty to the beast Around you I need not wear this tired costume By you, this animal is released
Your love for me will come in the future But for now I feel only hatred A bloodied, mangy creature A thing to be dreaded and then discarded
But your love will be mine! The only thing I do live for You are my sky, my stars and my sunshine And on that day of mutual love, the world will be but a healed-over sore.
The shadows of world we dont see, but breathe when we breathe, laugh when we laugh, cry when we cry, who see everything in our world while they lay invisible just under the surface free to all our emotions and grasping at our souls.
Need, want. So different, but so close together. a world of shattered glass and screams and bone does well to hide both those and the emotions they come from and cause.
"And I will cradle you dearly
And protect you from the cruel world and reveal to you my own
Perhaps then will you see my love clearly?
My world of shattered glass, screams and bone"
--There's a pattern here, in your writing. Like looking over scenery washed in candle-light, through an old cracked monocle. It could be just me though :P Anywho, this was a brilliant piece. I thoroughly enjoy how you use objects [i.e. broken glass], familiar sounds and such to symbolize the impending darkness in the piece. I also really like the small references to the work of other authors I've found in a lot of your work, it's neat and I've tried it and I know it isn't easy to get such subtle references in there without sounding like a Wikipedia page.
I think my favorite part (and this is the hopeless romantic in me coming out) has to be the last stanza,
"But your love will be mine!
The only thing I do live for
You are my sky, my stars and my sunshine
And on that day of mutual love, the world will be but a healed-over sore."
The way in which you wrote this reminds me of old poetry, and I absolutely love that, it gives it an antique and an over all genuine feel. Love, and not to be bitter but even if it doesn't last, always heals the heart. But when it's lasting it does a little something else and touches the soul. :] Valentine's Day is tomorrow, drop that last stanza on your gf and I guarantee success! ;]
Anywho, brilliant job! I loved it through and through! :D
The shadows of world we dont see, but breathe when we breathe, laugh when we laugh, cry when we cry, who see everything in our world while they lay invisible just under the surface free to all our emotions and grasping at our souls.
Need, want. So different, but so close together. a world of shattered glass and screams and bone does well to hide both those and the emotions they come from and cause.
"Behold her, single in the field,
Yon solitary Highland Lass!
Reaping and singing by herself;
Stop here, or gently pass!
Alone she cuts and binds the grain,
And sings a melancho.. more..