Sweet on Broken

on broken be sweet

 

Blassss …. Lap !*

With out expectation

Only wild of self emotion

To grabble up skin fearful

Until angle on centre of heart

 

Flutter makes small vibration

To develop existing what

be want another else

 

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Rumpin, 2009 Apr 02

man Atek

 

* = sound of losses something

Author's Note

please to review, tq

Reviews

[Anastasia Starlena]

This is a very good piece. the imagery is wonderful as well as the flow.

[S. Georgia]

I'm really 'digging' the way you write. It's lovely how you plant images in the reader's mind with a view short phrases.
Lovely poem.
-S.

[Saosinkid (Death whispe..]

wow i saw different images.
this was really creative and i liked the way you write.
i cant wait to read more.