Sorrow Came in Droves

a sad scene ...

The angels were shocked,

the spirits would glow,

right before them was an elaborate show,

on one counter,

small broken teeth on a silver tray,

and a little girl’s bloodied clothes,

laid out carefully in a graphic display,

the angels with horrified looks,

stared at the other table,

that had the girl’s book bag and school books,

sorrow came in droves,

as ghosts were hovering

over the dead girl’s clothes.

Reviews

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

A very dark morbid poem and I love it!! very well written with a nice structure and a great flow which allows the imagery which you describe really shine this is defiantly my type of work well done really liked this

[Dilan Gray]

I love how you can imagine everything. It is a really good poem, I really like it.

[Deactivated_BurningDemo..]

Haunting images.
The world is such a cruel place nowadays.

[OT]

very nice!! I love the strange rippling rhyme scheme you have going on! it's not fixed, but rather changing with the flow, it gives it quite a charming appeal which mocks the darker themes! nice!

[Cherrie Palmer]

images like this will keep you awake at night, and attack your dreams when you sleep

[.]

oh gosh..that is horrific!! brilliantly put together though, to capture so much emotion and story is amazing..true flash fiction!

[Mr. Morgenstern]

I will have nightmares for a week. It was a good poem though and it really got me thinking about what could have possibly been the reason for the poor victim!

[Jenny Nelson]

Such a horrible, violent world we live in, especially for children. I really like the contrast between the natural and supernatural world, reminds me of Frank Peretti. Very graphic description that well conveys a picture and feel. Indeed a very sorrowful piece but quite well done.

[morningstar]

wow this is great. you are an inspiration to writers like me :)

[MiidniightSoul]

Such an interesting piece. Very well written. It has a nice flow and a vivid imagery. An emotional and sad poem. Brilliant.