A B*****d Of A Case

an unsolved crime leaves a detective reeling...

The alley was dirty
where the murder took place,
it was a b*****d of a case,
the dead girl’s clothes and belongings
were still being checked for trace,
emotions were wrecked,
as nothing looked promising,
an unsolved murder,
the little girl had left nothing more
than an earring at the crime scene,
tempers hit the floor,
and sanity walked out the door,
a little girl with an empty face,
an unsolved murder,
it was a b*****d of a case.

Reviews

[Cassie316]

This is definitely captivating. I'm like the last three lines! However I'm not sure I'm convinced that this murder is unsolvable. If you were looking to improve it you could make it a bit longer by persuading us how unsolvable, and well.. how much of a b*****d of a case this is. Tell us maybe how they try to solve the murder, and how it doesn't work.. maybe how there aren't any finger prints left behind. You get the gist of it.

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csi in poetry..how clever! This is crying out for a story to be written, dark but enticing write

[Stacey]

What a suspenseful msytery!!! This should be a series of shorts...I want the back story and eventually the conclusion.

[Alex Zynder]

this makes me want to hear the whole story, and i wish it was!

[Alexanne Dauntless]

I really liked this. In particular the last three lines. It's really like an entire story compacted into a few short lines. You did a remarkable job, and I really enjoyed reading it.

[SilenceBringsTruth]

Love it! xD

[Justin Littlefield]

Damn that's piercing. What's screwed up is that similar b*****d cases are real and frequent. This write really puts you in that place and makes you feel the same melancholy chill as the spectators in the story

[SweetPeachesAlways]

You seem to find the pulse when you write and then your words flow along that throb...Great write!

[Liza]

provocative and engaging....triggering many emotions and left with a sadness and wonder...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

this is brilliant in the fact that it is like a still life work of art where beneath the actual surface image there are dozens of little cluelets hidden in the hues and folds of the piece that bring the center of the gem into full prismatic light~

[Grace Catherine C.]

I found this to be very witty actually, but also somewhat scary, it's a very good poem.