Whispered His Name

Devil welcoming a new sinner

He stopped just in front of Hell’s gate,

thought things over,

it was inevitably his fate,

he was crushed and full of rage,

locked away like an animal in a cage,

died,

no one cried,

he was humiliated, without pain,

and that went against his grain,

his ghost walked with a calm,

and he was once vicious and insane,

but in Hell that went unnoticed,

as evil placed no blame,

he was freed of all his shame,

as the devil whispered his name.

Reviews

[The Cougar's Den]

Oh snap! What a concept...
Great write!

[Wicahpi]

Oh, I like this one.
Very well done.
I have enjoyed reading
each and every line.

Wicahpi

[Brianna Brie]

Ooooh...Those last few lines are devilishly spooky. It gives me chills. Great write!!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Freed of his shame but sentenced to an eternity of hellfire and deprivation of God's Presence!

[Jo]

Beautiful imagery again and great tone of sadness. The flow is perfect. There's nothing I could suggest to make it better. And I loved the ending about the devil whispering his name. Very powerful.