The Excuse

You wanna lay in my arms,

   go ahead baby

I'll surrender my manly man to the caring nature of a mother for your gentle soul,

   Let my arms tame your lost conscience

then realize the sound of our heart's mirroring vibrations

   as you let free to All uncertainty,

A marvelous creature from the Heavens you are to me 

   The magnificent visuals of your presence are far beyond man's understanding

Marveling at your vibrant radiant skin

   I notice needs & wants beginning to share common interest,

Transformation from marveling to obsessed slowly settle in

   Knowing your touch is no shy of a miracle and cautious burns mixed in one

Im merely a survival in your telepathic universe,

   and for that, 

I must go

Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

Surrender of the manly man- wow!! I liked how you tried to open up yourself infront of her . The radiant skin of her heart with burns... but still you want to carress that scarred soul. But alas!! She is divine and time is fleeting by. You must go.. sorrowful ending amigo. I hope you would have made excuse to stay rather then go. :) nice write

~Sophy

[KK]

Thank you . Enjoy hearing from you

[Mazie]

This is so sweet.. in a way, spoke to me on a personal level. Very beautiful :)

[KK]

Thank you. Your words are wonderful. Glad you enjoyed it

[Matching Socks]

Wow! I'm blown away by the simple honesty of your words.
A manly man showing sensitivity, vulnerability is sexy, endearing.
It's a beautifully composed poem.

[KK]

Thank you Ana. Your thoughts and comments carry confidence to my ears. Thank you (:

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome KK.
I hope they carry confidence to your pen as well. :)

[RubyOmma]

I really like it, the powerful beginning and ending. I can see her and you. I love the skin line and the cautious burns. Great work. Superb.

[KK]

I enjoy hearing your thoughts. Thank you

[Rene Salinas]

A very respectable desire for unity expressed here. The part which makes it so real an difficult too is that you are willing to surrender. Then you let me know that out of the surrendering you might be able to reach the other soul. To touch even imbued in her world but you are to leave so soon?

It left me wanting more.

As if you were trying to uphold a thought.

The word wanna disturbed me (just fuzzy that way) send it into italics so it blends with the feeling of your writing.

But as I said that's just me

Thankyou

[Avinash]

A great ode to love a man can offer his sweetheart. Thoroughly enjoyed reading it.