Slap in the Face

Chicken Sarcasim

THAT was a slap
in the face
UN-MISTAKABLE!

And you
Pretending it never happend
Unflappably disconnected
Looking at me as though no assault was underway

Stinging sweet demeanor
Stealthy strategy to ignore courtesy
To ignore this extended hand

I just want you to know
I FELT IT
THAT WAS A SLAP!

Reviews

[Abhishek Izy]

That was a unique write. It’s like you pulled a moment of emotion and expanded into this worthy write.

It speaks volumes about the feelings of the recipient and I don’t know if you meant it but it works for me even as a metaphor. Nice one, Sir

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

The title really drew me into this write and the poem held my attention to the end. Made me chuckle. Tyfs

[Onlyme]

Oh, this is a sharp slap in the face right enough, Allan. A woman scorn says it all. Wickedly wonderful write.

[AllenS]

Thanks, do know the experience. It was wickedly wonderful and cleansing to recognize what was transpiring.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

And an ouchie it was! Love the ‘feel’ and style of this alliterative rant so cleverly written. Staccato lines are like slaps themselves- poetic slaps at that! Well, this should certainly teach the ingrate not to ‘dis’ you again Allen. Enough said and well-said.

[Tony]

"Stinging sweet demeanor
Stealthy strategy to ignore courtesy
To ignore this extended hand"

When you go to shake someones hand and they don't shake your hand, then they just smile and act like they didn't see you.

[Ken Simm.]

My first also with you I think. Now this is witty and whimsical threaded with slap-stick and an undeniable violence. A combination I find I like a lot.

[AllenS]

Ken, I so appreciate your deeper reading sending the signal than nuance communicates.

[AllenS]

Alan and Lydia thanks for reviewing Slap so many months ago. I had some health concerns that diverted attention for a while. But now back on course.

[Lydia Shutter]

Hope you are feeling better!

[AllenS]

Much better!

[alanwgraham]

I can connect to this AllenS! I'm not into slapping but the subtle barbed comment can slip out so easily and once it's gone you can't reel it back in without great embarrassment. The sad thing is that words given can be a blunt instrument and so often misconstrued.
Well done for a very thoughtful poem.
Alan

[AllenS]

Thanks Alan. Slapping is a bit brutal for me as well. There is, however, freedom in recognition, knowing that the apparent sacarin voice presented was not successful in hiding the intent. So true, words are unretractable and stand the risk of scaring permanently.

[.]

I have suffered this fate at one time; and for a reason I have never been able to understand. It is not so much the slap but the shock one has at being on the receiving end. It's affect was longstanding and changed my course from that point, dare i say it. Bruises gained, respect lost.

Sarcasm written with a realistic tone for some. A nice write.

[AllenS]

I feel the pain. Of course sarcasim turns the siletto by denying it meant you harm.

[AllenS]

Thanks for sharring your personal experience, it means a bunch to me.

[Lydia Shutter]

Sometimes it is best to ignore a slap in the face...don't give the slapper the credit he or she is looking for! Great choice of vocabulary here. Powerful. Lydi**

[AllenS]

Yes, Lydia, I agree. In this instance a wrote a poem about my feelings rather that confront the person directly. Twas freeing.

[Lydia Shutter]

Aha if you felt better afterwards, it was worth it!

[AllenS]

Yes thanks!