War and Peace

War and Peace

A Poem by Asilem

Constantly at war, constantly at peace
Will I ever have the feeling of sweet release?
You keep me on the edge, you keep me at bay
Please let me go, I couldn't last another day.

You're constantly above, constantly aware
Aware of my feelings, aware of my moves
You match them with yours, you match them with kisses
You hold me so close, a love so delicious.

© 2013 Asilem


Author's Note

Asilem
Thanks you to Night for the last line. :) It really... completes the poem.

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I can think of no other activity that is so gentle and yet so rough at the same time...this piece really captures that parallel :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asilem

11 Years Ago

Thanks for catching on! I was starting to think that no one really understood what it was about....
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

You're very welcome :)
Sometime love can seem like war and peace. I like the title and the set-up of the poem. A strong closing to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asilem

11 Years Ago

Thank you. :)
"You hold me so close, a love so delicious"...=) Sweet write, nice rhyme and flow...superb message...=)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asilem

11 Years Ago

Thank you for your help. :) And for the review.
Night

11 Years Ago

You're welcome...=)
cool ;D i like the rhyming pattern

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asilem

11 Years Ago

Thanks. :)

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Added on February 4, 2013
Last Updated on February 5, 2013
Tags: war, peace, love, sex, making love
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Asilem

Washinton DC, DC



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