Left There To Bleed

Left There To Bleed

A Story by Asilem
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a trajedy.

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In the beginning, I wasn’t happy. I was alone. I was desperately trying to hang onto something that was so smooth, so soft that I could never feel my fingertips grab onto what made me happy, what made me feel like I belonged.

            Though when I finally did manage to grasp an edge, I had begun to truly feel happy, loved. I wake up every morning without argument, eager to get away from my nightmares. The darkness I bury myself to escape my life. I was eager to get to that happiness.

            And because I am selfish, I gripped the edge tighter, taking too much of something that I had never even dreamed, let alone thought, would hurt me, slash a tear in my heart’s thin and feeble skin, to make me bleed.

            I had taken hold of the edge, never thinking about the sharp ridges that could hurt me. I had gripped it with all the little I had left in me, trusting my instincts to catch myself before I fall.

            The edges cut through the skin of my fingers, making me bleed and cry out in pain. Hoping without thinking that someone would save me, be at the bottom to catch me at the end of my terrifying fall.

            But no one did catch me. I landed at the bottom alone, and unloved, left there to bleed.

© 2012 Asilem


Author's Note

Asilem
This is kind of like a big metaphor/simile for a tragedy I'm writing.

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Wow, I didn't know you could go so dark?
I like it, you painted quite a vivid picture here. I hope there's more!
The last sentence " But no one did catch me. I landed at the bottom alone, and unloved, left there to bleed." Was my favorite part. So great, really I loved it.
I want to read this tragedy your writing, so you know where to send that R.R :)


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asilem

11 Years Ago

Haha yeah, I'll get to work on typing it. Thank you! And by the way, this is truly how dark it is in.. read more



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...besides poetry, I am an avid reader of all the dark stuff...Koontz, King, just to name a couple. this was a good entry into the "story", settting the stage for more. I would just work on not using the word "I" so much next time. Good job, let the imagination flow...lol.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asilem

11 Years Ago

:) Thank you for the tip. And the review.
Wow, I didn't know you could go so dark?
I like it, you painted quite a vivid picture here. I hope there's more!
The last sentence " But no one did catch me. I landed at the bottom alone, and unloved, left there to bleed." Was my favorite part. So great, really I loved it.
I want to read this tragedy your writing, so you know where to send that R.R :)


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asilem

11 Years Ago

Haha yeah, I'll get to work on typing it. Thank you! And by the way, this is truly how dark it is in.. read more

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Added on December 29, 2012
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Tags: trajedy, sadness, depression, psycological disorders, insane, crazy, vampires

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Asilem

Washinton DC, DC



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