Prologue

What happened then… the destruction that it brought. None of us ever thought that it could’ve happened, that he could’ve done that. All of that chaos, and no one was prepared for it either, just ways to blame it on the next person that you see, just wanting, needing, to have a reason for it. But even in the middle of this war, there was at least one shining light in the world, wanting to stop the evil that was plaguing the world, wanting to stop it, for the greater good. But when everyone came down with a deadly virus and when the people held dear to them were killed years before hand, where they went and who they went to determined the fate of the world, their friendship together and the outcome of that final battle, the last stand that we knew would only lead to death. This long and extensive was left to the only ones bred to do it, us. My name is Ashty Marie Elstric and with my guardian, Lamont Seamus Walker and, like our ancestors before us, we pledged a quest, a quest to save the world from this evil and cleanse it to return to it's original peace.

Author's Note

first story I dont think it's good please leave a review!

Reviews

[AK]

Nice story plot! I guess you could start off with a description of the situation as that part is clearly missing. That would be something like-
I looked at the battlefield. It was filled with the dead bodies of soldiers and their blood was splattered everywhere. The remnants of the atom bomb could be seen.
Or something like that(please I'm just writing it so you understand what I mean, it's not the words I expect you to write)
Then you could explain Ashty's situation and problem. Try avoiding the 'Im Ashty Elstric and this is..' part. It sounds too colloquial. Instead you could make a conversation which will automatically make the reader find her name.
You should try expaining the situation more clearly too. It seems really vague in the reader's mind. Please I hope I'm not too blunt, I just want to help.