Me

I'm doing better than you thought I could do

You thought my whole world revolved around you

Devouring all of my emotion

Leaving me cold and open

Naive to your ways 

I spent years, months, weeks, days.....

Listening, obeying, and mistreated

Pushed around, fell down, like I just don't get it?

What am I doing wrong?

What do I have to do right?

Confused, so consumed, weak

It's like still trying to drive a car when you're running on E

No need for your sorry and pleading

I've learned to become concerned about my feelings

Stood up for what I believed in.....

Now look at you

Cold, empty, so consumed

I see a replay in my life when I look at you

You thought my whole world revolved around you

I'm doing better than you thought i could do.

Author's Note

Honest opinions please. Negative and positive may be shared

Reviews

[luvs2write]

I liked it, I think a lot of people can relate to it. So many people are being "door mats" and not standing up for themselves. The only suggestion I have is that you might want to capitalize the i 's in your poem (What do I have to do right? instead of What do i have to do right?) Great work, keep writing!!

[Stormy]

I love this, very touching, reminds me of someone that my friend used to know. She bullied all of us, and I finally mouthed off to her and gave her my opinion of her. She ran off crying, as if what I had done was much worse than anything she had. I'm not recommending violence, but darn, it felt good.

[Laura Lynn]

"listening, obeying, and mistreated" so many people we feel like it sometimes, sometimes we so doing better than we thought or then less, we can do enough, I feel like this everyday like what did I do wrong? or vice versa, sometimes I'm like I did nothing wrong and don't need to apologies, tho sometimes I like apologetic person, 'I am only one person,' that is my motto to myself tho I know I am not the first person to say that

[Haley Wilson]

I couldn't have read this at a more perfect time in my life. Thank you for sharing such a relateable and hard-hitting piece!

[Emily]

I like your wording!
Keep it up!

[Alex Boyd]

I really enjoyed feels like you were sharing your testimony

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Honestly this is awesome !

[LilithDianaClio]

Really great word choice and a beautiful rhythm! My only suggestion would be to possible change "plead" to "pleading" in the 7th line of the third stanza. Great poem though!

[idiotproof--1]

I really liked this it's very relatable and well written. keep up the good work

[Rob]

Wow! Loved it, really had good flow and punch lines