If Only You Understood

I don't deserve this!
My feelings are not to be toyed with
You laugh but i cry
Little do you know how i feel inside

Mentally but not physically
I want to die literally
If only you understood
My joy is gone for good

These drugs are so temporary
Overdosing might lead to a cemetery
I just want it to be over
I  really don't want to be sober

You made me care
Who would of known it was just a dare
You took advantage of me
And now I sit here aimlessly

I could hear them
Whispering what happened
How could i be so dumb
To not know it was only fun

And now im here
Waiting to disappear
If only you understood
How i cared for you

Author's Note

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Reviews

[lovergirl]

I really related to this piece , waw ! pretty well done , i'm sorry for what happened with you , but i'm not too sorry cuz it made write this one that i really really liked . So i want to tell that don't care too much it's just a step in your life that you should learn of OK ! and he'll understand for sure how stupid he was to do what he did ;)

[MomzillaNC]

This one is visceral in it's honesty. The expression of feeling is palpable.

NOTES: The font choice is perfect for this piece. It has the harsh, glaring feeling of the sentiments expressed.

[Alex Boyd]

True to it's nature very realistic and many can relate to.

[A.J. Thompson]

Wow. Seriously this was awesome. Although one can argue it is an example of your 'run of the mill' hopeless romantic poem... you added in the element of addiction, which I think could have been focused on a bit more. Not to overshadow to over shadow the speaker's heartbreak, but rather to enhance the pain the speaker was feeling while delving into their addiction. I really enjoyed this one though. Keep 'em coming.

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

Yeah, sometimes people just don't get it, like one person likes another you know, they are just interested you know? I like meeting people. Sometimes we don't know what the effects will be and how positive or neither positive nor negative. Like I know this is about love but I met some people who were strangers today and that was very interesting. I didn't have to be part of the group just a participant and a bystander which was nice

[LHD]

This poem is very good! I love it, Great job!

[Jack Wolfe]

A piece with great emotional impact, the toying with someone’s emotions, luring them into a false sense of hope, acceptance, and possibly love. It sounds like the popular jock asked out lonely shy outcast, reels her in, only to produce her to a reality of humiliation and shame for his, and groups, pleasure. A sad common occurrence with the aftermath is depression, drugs, and often suicide, a damn shame. You relate the emotions well on paper; I do hope this is not non-fiction.

[Violet Ray]

Yes. This is very well non fiction. Its just so common in the world. Thats what inspired me to write it.

[Bella]

This poem is really good I love it. I wish I thought of a poem like that. Awesome job, love it.

[klawrites]

The pure honesty and hurt is unreal! You captured your feeling so beautifully! It's as if you just opened your heart and let it flow. That takes so much talent. Well done :)

[Skie blue.]

Wow! You know, a lot of writers are more worried about the tempo of the poem rather than what its supposed to mean. It's really, really awesome to read writing where its focusing on feeling rather than format. I think you nailed the feeling you were aiming for. Well done!