Some Men - A Poem inspired by a truly special man

I wrote this for my great papa who is not doing very well, we figure he doesn't have much time left with us. He was in the army, a steady figure in the church and devoted his life to helping people.

 

Some men take the world for granted,

And some see it as a treasure to be saved

Some men forget to fight for their peers,

And some know only to be brave

 

Some men scurry from thoughts of love,

And some will hold them dear,

Some men refuse to believe in something,

And some believe without fear.

 

These men are richer than gold,

They wield a valuable heart.

These men have tried to give,

With everything since the start.

 

These men are shining beacons,

In a world that can easily turn cold,

They keep good faith within the world,

A message trustworthy and bold.

 

We must listen to these men,

They’re growing few and few,

The one’s that teach you patience,

Who show you life brand new.

We must listen to the stories,

Which are stepping stones of a soul

And hope to gain some knowledge,

Into making this world whole.

Some men don’t know the value,

Of family, hearth and home,

But those that hold them dearly in heart,

Will never be alone.

 

Author's Note

Would just like some feedback as to whether it has any mistakes or doesn't flow right. I want it to be as flawless as possible. Thanks so much!

Reviews

[Demii]

I really liked this, it flows really well, and I didn't see or notice any mistakes, good piece.

[sansame]

Thank you very much. It was an emotional one, I appreciate your feedback! :)

[Sami Khalil]

A great tribute to your grandfather.

"These men are richer than gold,

They wield a valuable heart.

These men have tried to give,

With everything since the start."

Wise words indeed...:)......

[sansame]

Thanks very much, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...........