My Angels

A short little poem I just came up with.

My angels,
drenched with sin,
wings torn so deep from within.
declare your pain,
mark down every single name,
make them sting.
cut their final string,
sing of our dreadful deeds.

Author's Note

I do believe this poem is kinda cute...

Reviews

[Joseph - Michael]

Cute? I'll buy that for sure. But, I just have to say that it's very short and simple, yet there are a whole lot of the meanings behind to the writings. And I can see everything so well, so you wrote it so slow and smoothly as it shown a great deal of the pains that the angels are in the making...

On the other hand, it's all great here...

[Midnight Shadow]

Haunting and powerful. This packs so much punch for it's length. Brilliant bit o' writing!

[Carrie Montgomery]

8 powerful lines.
"declare your pain,
mark down every single name" these two lines stood out the most to me.

[Alex]

That was really cool! I am adding this to my favorites!