This Feeling

Love and Death

This feeling;

Welling up inside me, 

Is a rare creature. 

Is erotic bliss,

Covered in your scent. 

I can’t escape it. 

Everywhere I go,

Your presence surrounds me. 

Embraces me; Holds me, 

And won’t ever let me go.

This feeling;

Fills me to the brim. 

I can’t get enough.

It’s magical and beautiful, 

yet completely indescribable.

I want more. 

Love me, caress me.

Move your body in time to mine. 

The erotic moment;

becomes a glimpse of ecstasy.

This feeling;

Overflows my body. 

The creature within explodes.

I become animalistic with passion,

But sweet and gentle. 

I long for you. 

A longing that cannot be measured.

As our souls intertwine, 

I realize; We are one. 

Joined by destiny.

This feeling;

Leaves me empty. 

All alone inside. 

I need you back;

Without you I can’t survive.

I can’t escape it;

Yet you are no where to be found. 

Our lust and infatuation;

Seemed to disappear.

A magic trick I didn’t want to happen.  

This feeling;

Is leaving me lost. 

With no remorse or sorrow, 

But confusion, 

As to why I let you go.

I want you back. 

The creature within me, 

has been set free. 

Your scent still lingers, 

And your embrace still holds me.

This feeling; 

Is now like hell.

Scorching and Burning; 

Leaving holes in it’s path. 

Holes that tear me to pieces. 

I long to hold you one last time. 

But I cannot. 

I didn’t do this to you;

Yet I blame myself. 

We can never intertwine our souls again. 

This feeling;

Has left me crying. 

Balling in hopes of your return.

This is my last chance to see you. 

You will never come back. 

I can’t escape this place.

I want to lay by you forever. 

When it rains, 

When it snows. 

You never leave my mind.

This feeling; 

Is almost gone from my bones. 

A year later, 

I can still feel you. 

Feel your lips gently caress mine. 

I want you back.

Why did you have to?

You shouldn’t have. 

What does God have against me?

Please. Please. 

This feeling;

Of Death, 

And of pain. 

Leaves me no choice. 

I will be with you again. 

I long to be with you now. 

I will be shortly. 

My plan is to die too. 

Then we will be together;

Forever. 

This feeling; 

Is gone. 

My body remains, 

But my soul has vanished, 

Once again, to be with you. 

Reviews

[Dupree]

Wow. Most long poems leave me bored... This one held my interest. This as an amazing piece. I can not wait to read more from you. This is going in my library and I am going to show my boyfriend. Your emotion came across so wonderfully. It's quite inspiring and true to anyone who has ever lost their true love.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem of need and loss. In the emotion of love. Our gift can be cherish or wasted. We must always think and know who we desire to give our heart and passion. A very sad ending. In time we get up wiser and smarter to battle once again. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[WriterSki7]

Wow. A depressive love poem.
A very long poem; 19 stanzas at five lines each. It was a good poem, don't get me wrong, but your length does not do you any favors. I feel this could be phrased to flow better, but I leave that up to all you "expert poets" here on Writerscafe. Just my opinion, right?

[the_stoic]

how could you pen down my emotions ?? till the end it felt like you were describing what i feel ... "thank you" for giving a vent to my emotions ...

[E. R. Rawding]

that was great! i love the repetition used throughout, and your wording was perfect. great job!