water beneath me

water beneath me

A Poem by darkness*star1985

Clear night

moon shines bright

my eye close

to the cool water

under me

i float

drifting around

i let thoughts drop

and just enjoy the moment

wind warms my skin

water beneath me

peace of the moment

takes hold of my heart

for a while i am just

going to drift

everything is right

nothing is wrong

while i float

no real life problems

can touch me

while i am drifting

while eyes close

water beneath me

carrying me around.

© 2012 darkness*star1985


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"wind warms my skin" that is such a beautiful feeling/imagery.

I loved the ending because it's a happy one and unusual for a piece like this:
"no real life problems
can touch me
while i am drifting
while eyes close
water beneath me
carrying me around."

I like the optimism on life just add water and the world seem to fair much better. This is an extremely worth while thought, very uplifting. Thanks for the share.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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It's as though you've gone into a deep meditation where all is calm and quiet and peaceful away from all life's cares. Nice poem Darkangel.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

darkness*star1985

12 Years Ago

thank you
Bare trees

12 Years Ago

You're welcome.
"wind warms my skin" that is such a beautiful feeling/imagery.

I loved the ending because it's a happy one and unusual for a piece like this:
"no real life problems
can touch me
while i am drifting
while eyes close
water beneath me
carrying me around."

I like the optimism on life just add water and the world seem to fair much better. This is an extremely worth while thought, very uplifting. Thanks for the share.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh, that is nice.
I like this image of a midnight float, bobbing around and feeling relaxed. Of course, that's also how the film Jaws started.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I feel like this often, so I relate well. Wonderful Poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The sense of optimism is afloat here, I see. A rather relaxing (and maybe nonchalant) tone. Just appreciating the moment, not having worries distract you. Nice work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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