Stay with me stay

 

 My life just took a turn of the worst

you took your love and now your gone

there goes another one out my front door

the worst thing is i don't even blame them

i just wish someone would tell me the reason

 

Why can't you just stay with me, so just stay

I begging you to stay,

i hit my knees and i scream JUST SAY WITH ME STAY!!!!!!!

why can't you just stay with me stay... so stay

I know i have my faults, and I'm not prefect

but i need you here, so walk back in my door

can't we just started all over again.

can you just tell me the reason

i whisper to you on the other side of the door

please stay with me stay.. what can't you just

stay with me stay as the tears roll down my face.

Reviews

[Raven Starhawk]

I have been through this time and again. It has that certain hook that reels me in because every word is a word I can feel and relive the moment when I obviously became nothing to him. It makes no sense now as to why I fell so hard so fast but I guess there comes a time when we amaze even ourselves. Ultimately I was used though. And when I could no longer be just a "friend" I moved on. Basically he and I were friends to start out with but he seduced me awfully fast and I fell for it all. Then when I was old news he shoved me out his life. However the ironic thing was he still expected to be friends and expected me to be hanging onto his every word.

[darkness*star1985]

man are like computers that have no feelings. They suck at everything, that make you feel like you did something wrong. I would like one man to own up for once. sorry i have been drinking and really hating man right now.

[darkness*star1985]

thank you for you review

[Coyote Poetry]

Words can mean little when two people at their end. A very sad poem. I could feel the emotion and desire to hold on. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Chavon]

People come into our lives to deliver a message or lesson of some sort to promote evolution, not all get to stay they are a measure in which you judge the future person who will stay with you by, the standard of nothing less than this felt, but doesn't have the same journey as yours anymore. I know that does help right now, but that pretty much how it works I think mho.

[Shay]

the plea and certain desperation is strong.. Very enjoyable

[Cloud Andrews]

Ah now i can feel desperation. I actually stopped reading it for a little bit because I got frustrated with the second stance. Not because it was bad at all! But because it was fileld with desperation and tragedy but then i kept going : ). I just love how in all of your pieces you are able to evoke such powerful emotions. Keep it up!

[~Lizzy♬]

I was crying as I read this. I can feel the beautiful tragedy in this poem. It's so breath-taking to read. Wonderful! :)

~Lizzy~

[Skye]

:'( Its sounds like a horriable breakup, and I agree with Skylar, it does make you want to cry.

[Mockingbird]

this poor thing sounds so pathetic begging like that when the person doesn't want her anymore. she needs to move on with her life and find someone better.

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

AWWW!!!!!!!!! this make me want to curl up on the coach with a blanket and a big bowl of ice cream and just cry! i understand and can relate really well to this it was a great read and a great write great job!

[darkness*star1985]

thank you so much

[♥ Lexii Boo ♥]

no problem any time thanks for sharing the great poem