When the rain pours

When you're sad, I'll be there, to help, so let me.

When the rain pours

And the clouds

Are dark towers of water

When you sit

In poorly lit rooms

Alone with your thoughts

When the night creeps in

And tears create

Trails on your skin

 

I’ll be there

To give you hot drinks

And to switch on the TV

To turn on the light

And to get you to stand

To wipe away the crusted salt

And to help you sleep

So let me

Be there

Let me

Be the one

To ask what’s wrong

To hold you till you feel better

To kiss away the tears

Reviews

[Addict With a Pen]

I love how relaxed you made the writing sound. Almost calming the reader down.
I also found it interesting and poetic how you correlated the rain with this dark thoughts, whether they are thoughts of depression or thoughts of self harm or suicide, in the first stanza.
The author seems to offer all the sweet things they find in their own periods of darkness in the second stanza.I think you did a great job with that. It sounds so nice and happy.
The last stanza is great too because of this desire to love. It's like the author is a friend who wants more, and expresses themselves as someone they can trust and someone who is open to love.

Great job with this piece Ashley, and thank you for the reviews :)

[Ashley]

Thank you, I love your writing BTW