Fires Blazing

A poem about fire and it's qualities.

Red, and hot

Like a chili pepper.

It's legs and arms dance to the sound of music,

which blazes across the sea.

It's yellow core, similar to the earth,

makes a sound of pure hatred,

Like a thundercloud roaring!

Moving to the beat,

the heat filled, sweaty music.

Eager to invite others to the sound it's listening to,

So it touches it's people.

The people dance too.

The beat of a hot filled cavern.

How exciting! How amazing!

There are now thousands of people!

Dancing to the same amazing beat,

of volcanos and running.

A huge party is here, standing it's point!

This is where the party is.

Suddenly, could it be?

The government forces?

The blue eyed people race over like roadrunners,

Their feet strong with vigor.

They run like a river, they jump like a waterfall!

Oh, how frightening!

We the people must get away,

We must be free!

We run, but we can't escape the amazing beat!

Of smoke and flames,

like a pot overflowing!

The blue eyes punch and kick us.

Slowly, we die.

We lose our beat, we lose our mind, we lose our life.

We are nothing more than the ground of the earth.

The gravel blows in the wind.

Like a mother letting go of her child...

Author's Note

This one is very slim with similes and metaphors. I don't know what this is actually. Tell me what you think. Is it descriptive or flat? Is it exciting or boring? What do you recommend for my next poem?

Reviews

[wizardlypoet8]

This was good! I love how it was so passionate and motivating where it says
"We the people must get away,
We must be free!"
But then, it gets very sad and the last line, "Like a mother letting go of her child..." This line really makes the poem very emotional.
From revolution to death, the battle in this poem is very beautiful.

[Ashley Arita]

Thank you! This is a very different poem than my other ones, glad you enjoy it!

[silverwritinggoddess]

I like how you bring the fire to life! Fire does draw people because it's not only warm but there is fascination with it! I know I'm fascinated with fire. You did a fine job with this!

[Ivy]

Very nice poem! Full of energy and tenacity, right to the dusty end.
A great reflection on life. The fiery frenzy.
Kind of reminds me of how I viewed the world from my youth. ;)
Thank you for a great piece.

[jesserose99]

This is done so well, it makes me want to read you and learn something...I would like to hear you write about something like I don't know the birth of a star. I don't know just a random idea. Something celestial maybe, related to us.

[Ashley Arita]

Thank you for reading! Birth of a star? That sounds wonderful! That'll be my next poem.

[TravelinAlaskan]

This one is pretty fun! It takes me to summer bonfires and winter salvation, for fire is my womb in winter.

TA

[Ashley Arita]

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Joshua McNay]

We the people must get away,
We must be free!

I loved this, I had to read it a second time because I was enamored with it. It feels descriptive enough in my eyes. As there is a story told and I can see it play out. Great write and a wonderful read!

[Ashley Arita]

Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it! It's very different from my others poems, as those are a bit vague. This one has some story to it, which I did not expect!

[Joshua McNay]

Nothing wrong with having something unexpected happen when you write. That to me is when things are most fun because you didn't see it coming but it worked out well. And you are quite welcome!

[Ashley Arita]

Very true. Variety is the spice of life after all!