Poetry Flow

I really like this piece. The rhythm is fast paced. Think of it almost as spoken word. Comments please! :)

A dimly lit room

Is enough for me,

For the one I ache for

I cannot see.

 

I’ll sit here for hours

All quiet, alone.

The pain I feel chills me

Deep in my bones,

 

And I know they tell me

That love is blind,

But my words are stuck

Inside of my own mind

And I can’t let go.

Can’t go back, no,

These words were

Meant to be clearer

But they’re starting to flow

And I can’t stop

Can’t breathe,

Heart’s always been

On my sleeve

It’s a tattoo,

And it bleeds for you.

I never know what to do

When it hits me,

You left me,

But you’re not really gone;

This is love?

It just feels like we’ve been waiting

For so long.

 

We’re stuck still,

And we’ll be here awhile

And it’ll only hurt better

With every next mile.

How can something so pure

Bring out something so vile

In me?

It’s so easy to see

There’s a monster inside,

And I’m trying to hide

But it’s getting through.

It’s coming for you

And I want you saved,

I’m the one you should blame

Because since you left

Nothing’s been any different

Or the same.

 

Love, I can’t stop.

My hands are so cold

And I’m not sure how much longer

I can do what I’m told

And just wait here.

Being alone is my worst fear

And I live it right now.

And I’m not sure how

But I need you to see

Clearly, hurry,

And come home to me.

 

 

 

Reviews

[olgaoka]

I love the flow and rawness of this, you can really see that you connect with every single word that you write.
Great job!