Staked

When you have nothing left to lose. When you have nothing left.

Pathetic is the word that is best to use

to constitute the reasons for which I abuse.

I dont' know what happened. I don't want it this way.

Why is this better? I want you to stay.

I fall at your feet. I'm brittle. I'm crying.

I can't take this anymore. I feel like I"m dying.

How could this happen? How could I abuse

the one thing in life I can't stand to lose.

We may be so different, but is that so wrong?

There's always been harmony between our two songs.

I'm dying. I can't take this. I'm lost and confused.

How in the hell could I have ever abused?

For my sin, there's no penance. You deserve to be fine.

It's blasphemy to harm you, to damn the divine.

These words, they're toxic; acidic with truth.

Your burns and your scars come from my lack of couth.

My reason, my judgment, will fail you no more.

I don't want to hurt you. I've walked out the door.

I've robbed you of laughter and have grown to hate mine.

We used to be happy. Is this parting a sign?

The ash catches fire as it burns from the smolder.

Yet, as the fire ignites, it only grows colder.

My body rejects the fact that you're gone.

I can never be rid of you, but is that so wrong?

I've tried to change. I have and I failed.

I would try again, but that ship has sailed.

I want no one else. No one, but you.

I'm staked in the heart, but YOU'RE bleeding through.

You shouldn't suffer because of my pain,

So I leave you, my love, as I crawl away slain.

Please try to forgive me. It's all in the past.

Please tell me that this day won't be our last.

I see us; our future, in glorious time.

I see us together. This vision's sublime.

From rapture to rapture, from beginning to end,

We can no longer work unless one of us bends.

Too stuborn, too psycho, too wrapped in one's self.

These accursed traits were robbing your health.

I hate them, I hate ME, but I can't seem to change.

We weren't like this before. It all seems so strange.

I write you these words in the wake of my going

to leave you these thoughts as my love continues growing.

Now to your knowledge, I reap what I'm sowing.

I miss your soft kiss. I wish I weren't going.

I leave you my dreams that embody my bane.

I fight for my mind and my right to keep sane.

My mind remains clouded with what seems to be rage.

My existance is hollow. I need out of this cage.

You shouldn't suffer because of my pain,

So I leave you my love as I die here in vain.

Author's Note

I still love her. ...and I always will.

Reviews

[Ashley.M.E]

this is really good I like it alot. So much feeling. I read another of your poems, didn't leave a comment, but your really really good at it.

I noticed a few errors though... very little things though, a lot better then I can do I know I make a lot of mistakes, but I liek to fix them so... i hope you don't mind?
line 3. dont' (don't)
line 6. i"m (i'm)
line 37. stuborn (stubborn)
line 48. existance (existence)

[..R.I.P..]

This is really good. I'm awed by your talent. Great job.

[Rockebah]

This poem is unique to me. I have never read nor written one from this point of view. Very creative.

[.Bunnie.]

Aww...this is so sweet.... It's refreshing to have a different point of view than the abused. It's nice to see that even though we see only hate and abuse from them, they actually feel remorse. Okay, maybe not ALL of them...probably hardly any of them...but it's nice to know that people are out there who feel remorse for the wrongs they've done. This was an incredible read, it flowed so well, and the rhyming made it that much more endearing. As I've said countless times before, people tend to get tripped up with the rhyming, and it takes away from the piece...but you did very well. Great job! 20/10 :)

[MadasonBlue]

This is beautiful. I love these lines...

"...I dont' know what happened. I don't want it this way.
Why is this better? I want you to stay..."

"...My mind remains clouded with what seems to be rage.
My existance is hollow. I need out of this cage.
You shouldn't suffer because of my pain,
So I leave you my love as I die here in vain..."

Leaving someone so that they can be better off, even if it kills you to leave them, that's a sure sign of real love. The pain is evident. I love this.

[Sonife]

hey this won the contest!! congratulations!!

so emotional:)

[Amanda Avalon]

We used to be happy. Is this parting a sign?
The ash catches fire as it burns from the smolder.
Yet, as the fire ignites, it only grows colder.
My body rejects the fact that you're gone.
I can never be rid of you, but is that so wrong?

This is the second poem I've read within a matter of minutes that does an excellent job of describing how I'm feeling at the moment. When a relationship fails, sometimes we want to blame one another, blame ourselves... If only it wouldn't be so much to ask that we could justify the patterns we make, hoping they will lead us down the right path. Setting someone is a similar feeling to death, as your last lines clearly state. Very well done, to the favorites this goes!

[Flo_writer]

Truly a beautiful poem. You flow is absolutely amazing here. Such heart felt passion with words of magnificence.

[Flow~]

How best to say this? This is really good, I like how it reads too like a melody playing softly in the background. When we are bad for someone and we realize they would be better off without us it is a more deeper pain because we also carry Guilt along with the pain.

[unspokenguilt]

Playful in its words and very entertaining, with tons of emotion! It flows perfectly, Great write!

Thanks for entering my contest, Best wishes!
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