Staked

When you have nothing left to lose. When you have nothing left.

Pathetic is the word that is best to use

to constitute the reasons for which I abuse.

I dont' know what happened. I don't want it this way.

Why is this better? I want you to stay.

I fall at your feet. I'm brittle. I'm crying.

I can't take this anymore. I feel like I"m dying.

How could this happen? How could I abuse

the one thing in life I can't stand to lose.

We may be so different, but is that so wrong?

There's always been harmony between our two songs.

I'm dying. I can't take this. I'm lost and confused.

How in the hell could I have ever abused?

For my sin, there's no penance. You deserve to be fine.

It's blasphemy to harm you, to damn the divine.

These words, they're toxic; acidic with truth.

Your burns and your scars come from my lack of couth.

My reason, my judgment, will fail you no more.

I don't want to hurt you. I've walked out the door.

I've robbed you of laughter and have grown to hate mine.

We used to be happy. Is this parting a sign?

The ash catches fire as it burns from the smolder.

Yet, as the fire ignites, it only grows colder.

My body rejects the fact that you're gone.

I can never be rid of you, but is that so wrong?

I've tried to change. I have and I failed.

I would try again, but that ship has sailed.

I want no one else. No one, but you.

I'm staked in the heart, but YOU'RE bleeding through.

You shouldn't suffer because of my pain,

So I leave you, my love, as I crawl away slain.

Please try to forgive me. It's all in the past.

Please tell me that this day won't be our last.

I see us; our future, in glorious time.

I see us together. This vision's sublime.

From rapture to rapture, from beginning to end,

We can no longer work unless one of us bends.

Too stuborn, too psycho, too wrapped in one's self.

These accursed traits were robbing your health.

I hate them, I hate ME, but I can't seem to change.

We weren't like this before. It all seems so strange.

I write you these words in the wake of my going

to leave you these thoughts as my love continues growing.

Now to your knowledge, I reap what I'm sowing.

I miss your soft kiss. I wish I weren't going.

I leave you my dreams that embody my bane.

I fight for my mind and my right to keep sane.

My mind remains clouded with what seems to be rage.

My existance is hollow. I need out of this cage.

You shouldn't suffer because of my pain,

So I leave you my love as I die here in vain.

Author's Note

I still love her. ...and I always will.

Reviews

[Ashley.M.E]

this is really good I like it alot. So much feeling. I read another of your poems, didn't leave a comment, but your really really good at it.

I noticed a few errors though... very little things though, a lot better then I can do I know I make a lot of mistakes, but I liek to fix them so... i hope you don't mind?
line 3. dont' (don't)
line 6. i"m (i'm)
line 37. stuborn (stubborn)
line 48. existance (existence)

[samiashannon]

Amazing story, I like it a lot

[Fran Marie]

just dropping by to congratulate you on winning this contest~i knew you would; this is one of my faves ...it is so classic you! congratulations!

[Akshat♥]

This is so sad...
this kind of love lives forever in our hearts
and souls:(
leaving your lover alone ..and suffering yourself
is the hardest situation one can ever be:(
Going to my favorites ..Keep writing:)

[BrokenGirl]

This is f*****g amazing!

[Just Brooke]

Very emotional and powerful! You are gifted with words! I loved it=]

[TJ]

Very well written my friend. Very well written.

[HorrorMaster]

Very good

[Sara]

So many people have written the exact same thing, not as in the same words but this feeling or agony over another. I, amongst millions, has suffered at the hand of losing someone we care for greatly. To put a different perspective on this love is never truly lost unless we grow cold ourselves. Nor does love hurt, the loss of it does, just like falling, the fall itself doesn't hurt. I wish you luck in dealing with this pain for it's not the easiest to deal with and I hope writing helps, it's helps me at least. As for the poem itself, it hit home hard, many people can relate and once again your use of vocabulary is by far above average and you have great potential.

[RTB]

that was really really good you have talent