Lust and Longing

-This one's for you Rachael.- A poem written to capture the duality of obsession.

Who is this creature that slumbers so soundly?

What is this madness that drives so profoundly?

My cloak; the blackness, is all now, but spared.

My desire so close, but yet not, she's scared.

 

What is this power?

I don't understand.

So late is the hour,

I ought not lay a hand.

 

This creature, so perfect,

I must make her mine.

But its blasphemy to harm her;

To damn the divine.

 

I can't live without her,

Yet I ought not disturb

This slumbering creature

Who is so superb.

 

So with a small kiss, I betroth to thee,

This slumbering creature in front of me,

A promise, a pact, of eternal desire

That flows through my veins as a maddening fire,

That no man, nor no beast shall take thee from me.

I'm nothing to you. You're all to me.

 

I pray that you're dreaming this dream I desire.

I dare to hope that I am your fire.

So with this small kiss, I leave you this dream.

I pray that you ought not wake up and scream.

 

The damned are the damned.

Nothing has changed.

If you accept me,

You must be deranged.

 

I leave you, my sweet,

Unblemished; unknowing,

That this passion I hold

Is forever growing.

Not to your knowledge,

I reap what I'm sowing.

So with this last kiss,

I fear that I'm going. 

 

Upon a dark night, when the blackness clings,

I shall return as the reaper sings

His song of lament, so filled with longing.

I'll take you that night, to me belonging.

 

As I wear my cloak of night once more,

I want you to know that I'm outside your door.

Waiting for you, forever more,

Always watching, outside your door.

 

For now I vanish into this night.

Fear not the darkness. Disown the light.

These eyes that you feel upon thee are mine,

For it is blasphemy to damn the divine.

Reviews

[robin]

Some of the message of this poem is confusing. The darkness is also divine as is the creature looking over this soul. You make reference to damning the divine and blasphemy. The devil may care about blasphemy (aka he doesn't care) so who cares about damnation or blasphemy? I love the darkness equally with the light for they are ideas not reality. Which side is your darkness on? I read your bio so I know you want more than praise. I too am a romantic artist, I just wish your dark character had more conviction. He can be mad but let him have focus/certainty, a method to the madness.
Robin

[Miss Prince]

Ooooooo. I got chills reading this. Like literally. Reminds me of someone I know...
I'm glad someone wrote this poem. It's like every obsessive lover has had this poem in the back of their minds for so long -- and then you wrote it so that we could all have something to fall back on. Every word no one has said but has definitely thought.
Nice work.

[Iretex2012]

wonderful write...

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this is an awesome piece and I love it. The flow and rhyme are wonderful. You did a terrific job on this, great write!!!

Heather

[Kaitlin W. Blaylock]

I must agree with AK. Very Poe like. if this were written to me, or something similar, I would be utterly creeped out. Very much the stalker elementality here. However, as it is not to me, I must say that it is brilliant in the essence of forbidden love, when one of dark desires one of light but can never be.

[Jetta Zippora]

Beautiful!

[Adela Muresan]

This is truly a great piece of writing.
The passion is expressed perfectly, and the nobility and afection of the desired one is reflected trough the soft kiss very well.

I really really like it :D!

A.M.

[Tay Mo :)]

Great job!
Thanks for entering this in my contest... (you entered a while ago..i completely spaced and have only JUST had the time to read the submissions)
Good luck in the contest, and i really like this piece!

[Sonia]

wow...
no comments....
wow....
THAT WAS AWESOME!!!
great job, i loved it!

[Cคɾเ&#..]

Noce Job! I thought it was really beautiful. The fact that he wanted her forever more but was also wanting to kill her was a very powerful combination. The love for her was powerful as well. Great job and good luck in my contest!

[Astrid Hamilton]

This is love meets hate;
requited truth feels unrequited lies;
Shakespeare and Poe;
light and dark- chirascuro; chirascuro-
forest and ocean
moon and shadow
madness and certainty
never intererrupting
always welcoming
always waiting
but never
anymore

I like it.