Lust and Longing

-This one's for you Rachael.- A poem written to capture the duality of obsession.

Who is this creature that slumbers so soundly?

What is this madness that drives so profoundly?

My cloak; the blackness, is all now, but spared.

My desire so close, but yet not, she's scared.

 

What is this power?

I don't understand.

So late is the hour,

I ought not lay a hand.

 

This creature, so perfect,

I must make her mine.

But its blasphemy to harm her;

To damn the divine.

 

I can't live without her,

Yet I ought not disturb

This slumbering creature

Who is so superb.

 

So with a small kiss, I betroth to thee,

This slumbering creature in front of me,

A promise, a pact, of eternal desire

That flows through my veins as a maddening fire,

That no man, nor no beast shall take thee from me.

I'm nothing to you. You're all to me.

 

I pray that you're dreaming this dream I desire.

I dare to hope that I am your fire.

So with this small kiss, I leave you this dream.

I pray that you ought not wake up and scream.

 

The damned are the damned.

Nothing has changed.

If you accept me,

You must be deranged.

 

I leave you, my sweet,

Unblemished; unknowing,

That this passion I hold

Is forever growing.

Not to your knowledge,

I reap what I'm sowing.

So with this last kiss,

I fear that I'm going. 

 

Upon a dark night, when the blackness clings,

I shall return as the reaper sings

His song of lament, so filled with longing.

I'll take you that night, to me belonging.

 

As I wear my cloak of night once more,

I want you to know that I'm outside your door.

Waiting for you, forever more,

Always watching, outside your door.

 

For now I vanish into this night.

Fear not the darkness. Disown the light.

These eyes that you feel upon thee are mine,

For it is blasphemy to damn the divine.

Reviews

[robin]

Some of the message of this poem is confusing. The darkness is also divine as is the creature looking over this soul. You make reference to damning the divine and blasphemy. The devil may care about blasphemy (aka he doesn't care) so who cares about damnation or blasphemy? I love the darkness equally with the light for they are ideas not reality. Which side is your darkness on? I read your bio so I know you want more than praise. I too am a romantic artist, I just wish your dark character had more conviction. He can be mad but let him have focus/certainty, a method to the madness.
Robin

[LazerRays]

"it is blaspheme to damn the devine"
Wow. There's a sentence!!! That's powerful. What type of monster is this? This can also apply to real life situations too. Obsession with someone. An insane infatiuation. I wrote a poem about that "isn't it funny how people change" you should read it :P
This has a nice plot :D
Thanks for entering my contest!

[Charles Stewart]

I loved this poem, made me want to read on and on :) good job!

[sweetylee1994]

I loved it. Your poem made my heart pound in the pit of my chest. It pounded me to the core and the impact was so strong that I'm still facing chills. I really love it. It was deep ad to the point. Oh the desire it drives me mad. I love it.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Kudos for winning the Werewolf and Vampire Contest!

[Mistaken]

This is amazing haha:) i really do like this poem! i am really glad you entered it in my contests I feel honored:)

[Kayla_May]

that was very deep i liked it alot it was just wow =] great job.

[*!!Cammie!!*]

Damn!! That was great :) I smell a winner a'cookin haha. We'll see...I'm already thinking you may win my contest. I love the commitment in this poem, and it flows perfectly.

[Tina Kline]

Congratulations on your win! Another really great poem, great descriptions and
imagery make for a wonderful read! And the poem itself is great too!

[Sean M. Addams]

very intersting piece... this has alot going on in it but it all blends together very well.... the imagery in this paints a beatiful but haunting picture.... overall nice job on this one and thanks for entering it in my contest... fav lines...Upon a dark night, when the blackness clings,

I shall return as the reaper sings

His song of lament, so filled with longing.

I'll take you that night, to me belonging.



As I wear my cloak of night once more,

I want you to know that I'm outside your door.

Waiting for you, forever more,

Always watching, outside your door.

[Erotic Goddess]

I can't live without her,
Yet I ought not disturb
This slumbering creature
Who is so superb.

Delicious... I love the commitment that we feel from this character to the loved one. You did a great job building this suspense here.

xxoxx