Oblivion

Lyric for my old band, Godsendeath. Could also be classified as "Supernatural/Occult," or "Religious."

Take the hand of death and walk with him into oblivion.

 

This deathless omniscient devotion,

Forged in the fires of hell.

Slowly he leads me onwards,

To the spot where Lucifer fell.

 

This beckoning aura of torment,

Slowly draws me nigh,

To the site where judgment awaits me,

As black lightning cracks the sky.

 

The court of the fallen brethren,

Assemble for this fight.

A war to cover the heavens,

In a plague of endless night.

 

Rapture seems upon us.

Cloaked in black, the cold

Heir of kings ascends unto

the throne ancient lore fortold.

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Excellent! Great job on the rhyme scheme! It flowed so smoothly. I say it's more in the "Religious" category: Nearly every religion has some place of darkness... most preach about nothing BUT darkness (*cough* Catholicism *cough*) lol. Anyways, I really like the theme you've got here. Although it's constant theme that you find in a lot of songs, it doesn't matter- it still sounds great! You did an awesome on this! It was very entertaining; I could only imagine how it would sound with music. ^^ Thanks for posting!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Fran Marie]

Am lovin' the flow and rhyme to this deliciosly dark piece

well crafted and well expressed~

Thanks for sharing it in midnight madness

[Mr. Misanthrope]

Great imagery! And just as Blade & Blood said, I'd categorise this poem as 'Religious'. However, there was nothing particularly interesting that struck me. Maybe it's because I've read poems about darkness and Lucifer, etc, before, but the quantity has nothing to do with it. It doesn't stop a poet from being original.

Good job nonetheless.

Luke

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Awesome lyrics. The flow and rhyme are great and there's some really nice imagery throughout this piece. Fantastic work!!!

Heather

[R. L. Ambar]

Very interesting, well written....and rather mind taking.

Well done

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Rocher

[Sarah]

Loved the lines and how everything flowed so well. Kinda reminded me of a much shorter Paradise Lost. xD Good stuff. (:

[Dark Daughters]

Interesting lyrics it will be even better to listen to them along with music.

[Star-Runner]

Death and luicfier are not the same, This is a most wonderful write here, I'd like to classify this one as one of your best. This is very well written. Like it bunches.

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

It is strange that you have Lucifer and death as two seperate beings as most people see them as on in the same. I liked this one as well, but be careful not to change who you are talking about. Throughout the whole thing, you use the word "me" to describe the character, but then at the end you put "us". You need to claify who "us" is somewhere in the poem.

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

This is a decent piece. I find that some of it could use a little work, but all in all you have a nice flow going here. It reads somewhat easily, with the exception of a few lines, and I quite enjoyed what you wrote. You've got potential and I think with a bit more time and some more practice you'll be writing some very powerful poems. Nice job!