Day of Vengeance

Lyric for my old band, Godsendeath. Could also be classified as "Supernatural/Occult," or "Religious."

Once the skies part,

None are held back.

All are witness to this seige.

War clad riders,

Draped in sack cloth,

Bringing heroes to their knees.

 

-In numbers by the thousands, they come.-

 

Fall on your knees and pray.

Where is your god today?

Nothing remains for you.

You can't run.

 

Stare down death,

This day is mine.

No intention ill defined.

 

Prophets war, erupts, upon the bloodstained soil.

Fighting hatred, we breed a new destruction.

 

Seething hatred turns,

To blackened and bloody burns.

Hope's just a memory.

Here you die.

 

You're not saved,

Your place denied,

The rights of your soul are defied.

 

Martyred in vain, take your death from my hand.

Vengeance is vanquished when the lights leave your eyes.

 

Martyred. Tortured. Beaten. Revenge.

 

Day of a reckoning.

Day of awakening.

Day of a beginning.

Prelude to death.

 

Day of a massacre.

Day of a messenger.

Day of new history.

Prophecy fulfilled.

Reviews

[RougeAngel]

this was amazing. for me, when i read this, it was like i was standing in the middle of the battle that is to come. wow!

You're not saved,
Your place denied,
The rights of your soul are defied.

it is interesting to read something along the lines of what i would write but done in a different way. this is a great write! i enjoyed it very much!

[deadlife]

Hell ya! All hail to you man! Wow!
How old are you, hmmm..? Lol..
Goth! Hell ya! I'm tearing myself..pure..
It's wonderful..kill.. Kill this damn earth..cut it into pieces. And come to hell.. I'm telling you..we'll party there!

[MarieCo214]

That was interesting. I actually smiled at this one. Every line draws me, every line is dark. I liked that very much. Unlike the last two poems I read from you, this one didn't rhyme as much. There's not actual rhythm to be found in the words at times, but because of the meaning, that's easily overlooked.
These are interesting lyrics. I'd love to hear how they sound. Nice job. I liked it.

[Star-Runner]

YES! YES! YES! Where is your God? Love that line, that is so true among many. Most worship and idolize all these false Gods, when they shoudl fall to their knees before him ask seek him and ask for repntance and ask for forgiveness and to be saved. This write here I'd say is perfect will to me as least, Very well written.

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

One thing I like about your writing is that they all seem to link together but have different messages.

"Vengeance vanquished when the lights leave your eyes." --- Make sure to be careful when you are writing about wars and such. You switched your tense in this sentence from past [vanquished] to present [leave]. This can confuse your audiance quite a bit. Be careful of that.