Shoutout

This is my shout out to all of the people in this world who use others for personal gain, with no regard or respect for any form of life other than their own.

Now, why all this hate?

Why must you constantly discriminate?

How can you see me, being me,

Yet feign acceptance with hypocrisy,

Create another controversy,

And scream, "This is idiosyncrasy!"

Syncratic, yet dramatic.

Claiming movement, yet so static.

This is all a convolution.

It's an illusion. There is no solution.

Using all people for what you can gain,

I detect no respect and its driving me insane.

Give the respect and earn what you reap.

There is no honor in a world of deceit.

You are no soldier and you fight for no cause.

You fight for your addiction to people, but did you ever just stand there and pause

To think of the pain that burns in your wake?

When the finger's on you, oh, its a mistake.

Everyone's at fault, but you, and its burning.

You know the truth, but you're not concerning

Yourself with the details lit by your fire.

Your devotion to YOU is your only desire.

So remember that pain that burns in your wake.

Everyone knows it, but you. You're a fake.

Reviews

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

This is a very powerful poem. You have a lot of potential to turn this into a verbal poem. The theme seems to be a trend these days and I hope that more people read this piece of work to realize that everyone needs to wake up and be kind to each other. You can never gain anything without the help of others, but it is not a take take situation. It's a give and recieve one.

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

This was wonderful. The flow. The rhyme. the description at just the right time. Very nice job. I can see this as spoken word. Actually, I heard it as spoken word in my head.
Love All, Mejasha

[bluessadmood]

yes this is very strong ,the world has gone shameless,everybody is using others for their personal gain,its a shame

[L.G. Knight]

Hot! Hot! Hot! I love the flow the random rhymes the message just pretty much everything about thisa poem!

Great Job!

~Frances~

[deadlife]

Aaaaawwwsomme!
I'm screaming.. Rhyme.. You've got it!
They are burning all men.. Burn them man! Hold them all..tie them..Let there drinks be kerosene..Burn them.. Burn them all!
I'll give you my light..Burn them alive.
Let there be FIRE.

[Mr. Lopez]

DAMN! I LOVED THIS PIECE. I felt as if these words were pulled straight from the story of my life. How very betrayed I have been and to know I do not stand alone brings a strange peace to my heart. You capture "the fake one" in th headlights of truth. To be struck where they stand and left to the side of your fast highway to honesty. Always be true to yourself and others will flock to your side. There are many who cannot function without honesty as a for front to their lives and to those who cannot........fall to the side to be forgotten. Geat writing my friend.

[J.D. Pine]

A good piece. I like how you summed everything up at the end with those three words, "You're a fake". To me it drove the poem home. Good job.

[Silent Pacer]

Ah, the one that caused so much trouble... lol.. I really like the fact that the guilty can always see themself in this and the Inocent can not. Not sure if you realized that dude, but it's true.

[Ashes of Apathy]

Morgan,
I really the enjoyed the vivid imagery you use in this peice. The cadence flows along great, especially with each syllable cluster concluding with a "tion." Nice work there. There only seeems to be once place where the cadence seems to of strayed off of the path a bit. Here: "You fight for your addiction to people, but did you ever just stand there and pause." In this stanza I would consider leaving the word "there" out. Making it end with "stand and pause." If you say it in cadence as i suggested the syllable count seems to stay more consistant with the rest of the piece. Just a thought.
-jr

[Alicia Isabella Lane]

Wow was this ever intense. The voice of your message is powerful in the extreme!!! And lyrically brilliant as well. I really loved this!!!